Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

In Vietnam, more parents want their children to go to a public school instead of a private school. Do you know why ?

In Vietnam, more parents want their children to go to a public school instead of a private school. Do you know why? 25dmX
Public and private school have the same quality of teaching. But there are still many differences between two school. Firstly, in terms of tuition, there‘s a pretty obvious difference. Public school are funded by the State so tuitions fees are low and privates school are private investments so tuitions fees are much more expensive. Secondly, due to the huge difference in tuition fees, private school have a better facilities than public school. Thirdly, privates school students will be said to be less intelligent than public school student for this reason more parents want the childre to go to public school. But i don’t think so. Studying everywhere is same, just depends on the ability and level of each person
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Public
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
have the same quality of teaching.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
there are
still
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
differences between two
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
Firstly
, in terms of tuition, there‘s a pretty obvious difference.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
are funded
by the State
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
Possible spelling mistake found.
tuitions
fees are low and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
privates
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
investments
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
Possible spelling mistake found.
tuitions
fees are much more expensive.
Secondly
, due to the huge difference in tuition fees,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
have a better facilities than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
Thirdly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
privates
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
students will
be said
to be less intelligent than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
student
for this reason
more parents want the
Possible spelling mistake found.
childre
to go to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
don’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
. Studying everywhere is same,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
depends on the ability and level of each
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
person

IELTS essay In Vietnam, more parents want their children to go to a public school instead of a private school. Do you know why?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
118 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • In Vietnam, more parents want their children to go to a public school instead of a private school. Do you know why ?