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In this modern era, there are a number of countries, which have a tendency to import the foreigner food all over the world.Recently,these activities lead to both advantageous and disadvantageous consequences. This essay would show my point of view about both sides of this issue

In this modern era, there are a number of countries, which have a tendency to import the foreigner food all over the world. Recently, these activities lead to both advantageous and disadvantageous consequences. This essay would show my point of view about both sides of this issue 7LQR5
In this modern era, there are a number of countries, which have a tendency to import the foreigner food all over the world. Recently, these activities lead to both advantageous and disadvantageous consequences. This essay would show my point of view about both sides of this issue On the one hand, food importing countries are able to vary their domestic volume of food and also make profits for those exporting ones. Firstly, when nutrition demands are higher and higher day by day, the governments need to meet the requirements of all the citizens. Thus, not only international relations but also people’s health qualities are improved by consuming imported food. Secondly, all of the exporting countries make money from providing food to other countries. Beside returning their profits back to contribute to the national economy, it could help them to promote their brands internationally and access more closely to foreigner customers. On the other hand, due to distributing food to other countries, foreigner businesses have gained success in the worldwide market. However, this is also a factor that leads to less consumption of internal food in each country. Furthermore, It is inevitable that the higher requirements people have, the more easily poor imitations are produced. For example, when people order a huge number of oversea products, but not research carefully their origins and providers. Then, they could receive a lot of food with an unsafe standard and worsen their health too. To sum up, I reckon that the increase in importing food almost has positive effects on both political and living grounds. Moreover, governments need to find solutions to better food problems, which involve low quality food, harmful chemicals in food, etc.
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, which have a tendency to import the foreigner
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food
all over the world. Recently, these activities lead to both advantageous and disadvantageous consequences. This essay would
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show
my point of view about both sides of this issue

On the one hand,
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food
importing
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countries
are able to vary their domestic volume of
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food
and
also
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make
profits for those exporting ones.
Firstly
, when nutrition demands are higher and higher day by day, the
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governments
need to
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only
international relations
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also
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people
’s health qualities are
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improved
by consuming imported
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food
.
Secondly
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all of the
exporting
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countries
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money from providing
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food
to other
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countries
. Beside returning their profits back to contribute to the national economy, it could
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help
them to promote their brands
internationally
and access more
closely
to foreigner customers.

On the other hand
, due to distributing
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food
to other
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countries
, foreigner businesses have gained success in the worldwide market.
However
, this is
also
a factor that leads to less consumption of internal
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food
in each
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country
.
Furthermore
, It is inevitable that the higher requirements
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people
have, the more
easily
poor imitations
are produced
.
For example
, when
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people
order a huge number of oversea products,
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but
not research
carefully
their origins and providers. Then, they could receive
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a lot of
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food
with an unsafe standard and worsen their health too.

To sum up, I reckon that the increase in importing
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food
almost has
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positive
effects on both political and living grounds.
Moreover
,
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governments
need to find solutions to better
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food
problems, which involve low quality
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food
, harmful chemicals in
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food
, etc.
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IELTS essay In this modern era, there are a number of countries, which have a tendency to import the foreigner food all over the world. Recently, these activities lead to both advantageous and disadvantageous consequences. This essay would show my point of view about both sides of this issue

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3 paragraphs
281 words
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