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In this has very common borrow money, people have credit card and mortgage . it's very risky or benefic .both view and give your opinion

In this has very common borrow money, people have credit card and mortgage. it's very risky or benefic. both view and give your opinion VQMJJ
To begin with, nowadays borrow wealth has become extremely common for individual but mostly people are prefer to buy car by credit card as well. Although this is better way but sometime it will be too risky. i will discuss in upcoming paragraphs with relevant example On the one side, In these days, everyone aspire to buy a home and car with the borrow money. while its too much risky because some people are very wealthy so they can easily afford buy anything but most individuals belong to middle class family so that always prefer to borrow money and they think it good idea but sometime they will lost their job in any reason. Moreover when people will take borrow so that do return payment in monthly like 10, 000cash per month, when they cannot return payment so financier company will take to their car. They cannot take any action for example, when people will take borrow wealth so they have to return money with the double half as 10lakhs so they will return 12lakhs. On the other hand, borrow money it better for everyone people can take borrow money for their need and they can return wealth with monthly payment and they can fulfill their desire. If they will buy anything without borrow money so they have to give too much money and they can more chance of dipression because they sell anything like as property. if they will help of borrow money so they can easily afford anything, which want to achieve and they can also return payment without any burden and they can easily fulfill their desires with the help of financial cost. At the last, it can be summed up that statement it's very good idea borrow money and people can easily buy car but sometime they cannot afford monthly salary so it can be too risky. They can lost their property.
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with, nowadays
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borrow
wealth has become
extremely
common for individual
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but
mostly
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people
are prefer to
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buy
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car
by credit card
as well
. Although this is
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better
way
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but
sometime it will be too risky.
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will discuss in upcoming paragraphs with relevant example

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aspire
to
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buy
a home and
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car
with the
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borrow
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money
.
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while
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its
too much risky
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because
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some
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people
are
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very
wealthy
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so
they can
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easily
afford
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buy
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anything
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but
most individuals belong to middle
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class
family
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so
that always prefer to
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borrow
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money and
they
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think
it
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good
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idea
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but
sometime they will
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lost
their job in any reason.
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Moreover
when
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people
will take
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borrow
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so
that do
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return
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payment
in monthly like 10, 000cash per month, when they cannot
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return
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payment
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so
financier
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company
will take to their
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car
. They cannot take any action
for example
, when
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people
will take
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borrow
wealth
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so
they
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have to
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return
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money
with the double half as 10lakhs
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so
they will
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return
12lakhs.
On the other hand
,
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borrow
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money
it better for everyone
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people
can take
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money
for their
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need and
they can
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return
wealth with monthly
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payment and
they can fulfill their desire. If they will
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buy
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anything
without
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borrow
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money
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so
they
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have to
give too much
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money and
they can more chance of
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dipression
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because
they sell
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anything
like as property.
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if
they will
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help
of
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borrow
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money
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so
they can
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easily
afford
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anything
, which want to
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achieve and
they can
also
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return
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payment
without any
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burden and
they can
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easily
fulfill their desires with the
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help
of financial cost. At the last, it can
be summed
up that statement it's
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very
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good
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idea
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borrow
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money
and
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people
can
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easily
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buy
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car
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but
sometime they cannot afford monthly salary
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so
it can be too risky. They can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "lose"
lost
their property.
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IELTS essay In this has very common borrow money, people have credit card and mortgage. it's very risky or benefic. both view and give your opinion

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