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Look at the pictures, which show the process of making cherry jam.

Look at the pictures, which show the process of making cherry jam. bDnRW
The picture shows the process of making cherry jam production lines. There are 9 main stages. The process starts by gathering cherries from the tree and fishing them by labeling the jars. First, cherries are collected by spreading a sheet on the ground and shaking the tree. Next, the cherries are collected and are transported by trucks. After that, cherries are sent into an automatic machine in order to remove the leaves and stems. Next, the washing process is done by machine and they are moved on a ramp. After a while, the stone is moved like a conveyor in order to remove the cherries. The next stage is cooking cherries in a giant port with extra ingredients added. After checking the quality of the jam, the jars are filled with jam in an automated process. Finally, all products have labels stuck on the jars.
The picture
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shows
the process of making cherry jam production lines.

There are 9 main stages. The process
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starts
by gathering
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cherries
from the tree and fishing them by labeling the jars.

First
,
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cherries
are collected
by spreading a sheet on the ground and shaking the tree.

Next
, the
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cherries
are collected
and
are transported
by trucks.

After that,
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cherries
are
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sent
into an automatic machine in order to remove the
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leaves
and stems.

Next
, the washing process
is done
by
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machine and
they are
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moved
on a ramp.

After a while, the stone is
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moved
like a conveyor in order to remove the cherries.

The
next
stage is cooking
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cherries
in a giant port with extra ingredients
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added
.

After checking the quality of the jam, the jars
are filled
with jam in an automated process.

Finally
, all products have labels stuck on the jars.
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IELTS essay Look at the pictures, which show the process of making cherry jam.

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  American English
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145 words
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