Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Look at the pictures, which show the process of making cherry jam.

Look at the pictures, which show the process of making cherry jam. bDnRW
The picture shows the process of making cherry jam production lines. There are 9 main stages. The process starts by gathering cherries from the tree and fishing them by labeling the jars. First, cherries are collected by spreading a sheet on the ground and shaking the tree. Next, the cherries are collected and are transported by trucks. After that, cherries are sent into an automatic machine in order to remove the leaves and stems. Next, the washing process is done by machine and they are moved on a ramp. After a while, the stone is moved like a conveyor in order to remove the cherries. The next stage is cooking cherries in a giant port with extra ingredients added. After checking the quality of the jam, the jars are filled with jam in an automated process. Finally, all products have labels stuck on the jars.
The picture
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
the process of making cherry jam production lines.

There are 9 main stages. The process
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
starts
by gathering
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cherries
from the tree and fishing them by labeling the jars.

First
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cherries
are collected
by spreading a sheet on the ground and shaking the tree.

Next
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cherries
are collected
and
are transported
by trucks.

After that,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cherries
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
into an automatic machine in order to remove the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leaves
and stems.

Next
, the washing process
is done
by
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
machine and
they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
on a ramp.

After a while, the stone is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
like a conveyor in order to remove the cherries.

The
next
stage is cooking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cherries
in a giant port with extra ingredients
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
.

After checking the quality of the jam, the jars
are filled
with jam in an automated process.

Finally
, all products have labels stuck on the jars.

IELTS essay Look at the pictures, which show the process of making cherry jam.

Essay
  American English
10 paragraphs
145 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Look at the pictures, which show the process of making cherry jam.