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In this essay, I’m going to talk about my city.

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In this essay, I’m going to talk about my city. I live in Ho Chi Minh city, one of the largest cities in Vietnam. My city has totally 24 districts. My house located in district 8, but my school is in district 6! Actually, It takes me only 15 minutes to go to school from my house. I study at Mac Dinh Chi high school, which is quite famous in Ho Chi Minh city for it’s qualities. That’s is only about my school. Now i’ll tell you about my city. HCMC has a very large number of population. In the early morning, many people rush out of their house to go to company or school. At that time, roads are full of traffics like motorbike, car or bus. And there are traffic jams, too. It shows that HCMC is busy with many kinds of activities. Students flock to their school, adults go to their company to do their job. Some of them like to stop on their way to school or company to buy food. I usually to that, too. After a busy morning, people take a rest in the noon. Some come back home to eat lunch, but some still stay at their work place and buy their lunch from the shop nearby. After lunch, everybody continue working. They work untill 5, 6 PM. 6PM is rush hour. Many people finish their work, students finish their school day, and they all come back home at 6 PM. Peolple in HCMC like to go out at night for entertainment very much. They like to go for sightseeing, too see the street lights, beautiful decorations or go to the parks with their children. Some family just stay at home to watch tivi or listen to radio. Because they want to stay home and take a rest after a busy day outside.
In this essay, I’m going to talk about my city.

I
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live
in
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Ho Chi Minh city
, one of the largest
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cities
in Vietnam. My city has
totally
24 districts. My
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house
located in district 8,
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but
my
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school
is in district 6! Actually, It takes me
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only
15 minutes to go to
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school
from my
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house
. I study at Mac
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Dinh
Chi high
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school
, which is quite
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famous
in
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Ho Chi Minh city
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for it’s qualities
.
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That’s is
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only
about my
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school
.
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Now
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i’ll
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tell
you about my city.
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HCMC
has a
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very
large number of population. In the early morning,
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many
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people
rush out of their
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house
to go to
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company
or
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school
. At that time, roads are full of traffics like motorbike, car or bus. And there are traffic jams, too. It
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shows
that
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HCMC
is busy with
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many
kinds of activities. Students flock to their
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school
, adults go to their
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company
to do their job.
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Some
of them like to
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stop
on their way to
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school
or
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company
to
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buy
food. I
usually
to that, too. After a busy morning,
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people
take a rest in the noon.
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back home to eat lunch,
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still
stay at their work place and
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their lunch from the shop nearby. After lunch, everybody
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continue
working. They work
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untill
5, 6 PM. 6PM is rush hour.
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finish their work, students finish their
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day, and they all
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come
back home at 6 PM.

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Peolple
in
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HCMC
like to go out at night for entertainment
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very
much. They like to go for sightseeing, too
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see
the street lights,
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beautiful
decorations or go to the parks with their children.
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family
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just
stay at home to
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tivi
or listen to radio.
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Because
they want to stay home and take a rest after a busy day outside.
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IELTS essay In this essay, I’m going to talk about my city.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
310 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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