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Cars and modern ways of commuting have changed cities' architecture, lifestyle, and the environment.

Cars and modern ways of commuting have changed cities' architecture, lifestyle, and the environment. 2bge6
Cars and modern ways of commuting have changed cities' architecture, lifestyle, and the environment. Although communication is vital, I do not think there is any place for cars in the future. Human beings face a shortage of energy supply especially fossil fuels. Besides, we have polluted our planet since the industrial revolution, and it is time to review our behavior towards the earth. On the other hand, technology always surprises us with new inventions. First, some scientists have predicted that our resources will be exhausted by 2050 and as you are aware cars combust fossil fuels to run. As a result, we will have fewer cars because of the scarcity of fuel. Even if we thriftily use this precious resources, we can not expect to have them for a long time. There are, however, some alternative fuels such as biodiesel, which is derived from agriculture products, they can not be as practical as fossil fuels. Second, we have contaminated our planet with our cars, and it is high time to cease producing them. Scientists have reported that earth average temperature is increasing 0. 5 degrees annually. Furthermore, they claim the primary reason is greenhouse gases which trap warmth. Cars release large amounts of carbon dioxide as they run and that is why we should stop using cars in the future to save our planet. Third, science and technology always bring us new devices, methods and exceptionally efficient ways of commuting. For example, I read an article about Hyper-Loops, which is one of the most high-tech breakthroughs in the communication industry. They can be used as public transportation. Not only they are clean, comfortable, quick but also they can get people where they want as soon as possible. For all the reasons that I have stated, I believe cars will be obsolete soon. We do not have fuels to run our vehicles forever, and they endanger life on earth. I am sure science and technology will find appropriate solutions for the problem aforementioned.
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and modern ways of commuting have
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changed
cities' architecture, lifestyle, and the environment. Although communication is vital, I do not
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think
there is any place for
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cars
in the future. Human beings face a shortage of energy supply
especially
fossil
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fuels
.
Besides
, we have polluted our planet since the industrial revolution, and it is time to review our behavior towards the earth.
On the other hand
, technology always surprises us with new inventions.

First
,
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some
scientists have predicted that our resources will
be exhausted
by 2050 and as you are aware
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cars
combust fossil
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fuels
to run.
As a result
, we will have fewer
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cars
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because
of the scarcity of
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fuel
. Even if we
thriftily
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use
this precious resources, we can not
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expect
to have them for a long time. There are,
however
,
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some
alternative
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fuels
such as biodiesel, which
is derived
from agriculture products, they can not be as practical as fossil fuels.

Second, we have contaminated our planet with our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
, and it is high time to cease producing them. Scientists have reported that earth average temperature is increasing 0. 5 degrees
annually
.

Furthermore
, they claim the primary reason is greenhouse gases which trap warmth.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Cars
release large amounts of carbon dioxide as they run and
that is
why we should
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stop
using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
in the future to save our planet.

Third, science and technology always bring us new devices, methods and
exceptionally
efficient ways of commuting.
For example
, I read an article about Hyper-Loops, which is one of the most high-tech breakthroughs in the communication industry. They can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
as public transportation. Not
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only
they are clean, comfortable, quick
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but
also
they can
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get
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people
where they want as
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soon
as possible.

For all the reasons that I have stated, I believe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
will be obsolete
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. We do not have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
to run our vehicles forever, and they endanger life on earth. I am sure science and technology will find appropriate solutions for the problem aforementioned.

IELTS essay Cars and modern ways of commuting have changed cities' architecture, lifestyle, and the environment.

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6 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
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