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Some people believe that the only way to see God is through Jesus, others think that there are other ways regardless. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion v.3

Some people believe that the only way to see God is through Jesus, others think that there are other ways regardless. 3
This earth is created by God only. However, nobody has seen him throughout the history considerably. Where a group of individual thing, specifically "The religion, God names" who believe that only Jesus can help to see God. Whereas, others are in the favour of to find some other form to meet God. While, I personally pay attention to individuals' inner qualities rather than any term of God, which is given by the nature only. This essay will discuss both the views behind my view point. Although, Mankind has made up their mind set to worship Jesus can only be the means to find God. Not only grown-up, but children are affected by this thought. Consequently, this generation is paying attention to superstitions rather than their inner qualities and good behaviour. In this contemporary era, superstitious is kind of a business has been dramatically increasing. Consequently, people are more depending on God's nickname, but the actuality has been vanished that God is everywhere and in everything, who is looking after the earth to give punishment for any wrongdoing at any pace of life. There is an another school of thought where people believe that "God is only one" but the different label has been given by the different religions. This is a paradoxical statement, to put it in another means it contradicts the precedent but true. One should focus on their good karma rather than believing in any kind of spiritual names. We are living in an egalitarian society, where people are in egalitarianism as a boy or a girl, nevertheless, to worship, in some religion's girls are not allowed, as a result, could girls not be able to see God in their whole life? We should be stopped on trusting in the name of Jesus, but believing on ourself could be the best way to seek God. To summarise, Jesus is only the name, by which we can worship, to make all understand that someone is there who is looking after forgiving punishment for any wrongdoing, but cannot find God. Nevertheless, we should not be totally dependent on the name but pay attention to good karma either for saving the world or respect others, which is counted at the end of our life.
This earth
is created
by God
only
.
However
, nobody has
seen
him throughout the history
considerably
. Where a group of individual thing,
specifically
"
The religion, God names
"
who believe that
only
Jesus can
help
to
see
God.
Whereas
, others are in the
favour
of to find
some
other form to
meet
God. While, I
personally
pay attention to individuals' inner qualities
rather
than any term of God, which is
given
by the nature
only
. This essay will discuss both the views behind my view point.

Although
, Mankind has made up their mind set to worship Jesus can
only
be the means to find God. Not
only
grown-up,
but
children are
affected
by this
thought
.
Consequently
, this generation is paying attention to superstitions
rather
than their inner qualities and
good
behaviour
. In this contemporary era, superstitious is
kind of a
business has been
dramatically
increasing.
Consequently
,
people
are more depending on God's nickname,
but
the actuality has
been vanished
that God is everywhere and in everything, who is looking after the earth to give punishment for any wrongdoing at any pace of life.

There is
an another school
of
thought
where
people
believe that
"
God is
only
one
"
but
the
different
label has been
given
by the
different
religions. This is a paradoxical statement, to put it in another means it contradicts the precedent
but
true. One should focus on their
good
karma
rather
than believing in any kind of spiritual
names
. We are living in an egalitarian society, where
people
are in egalitarianism as a boy or a girl,
nevertheless
, to worship, in
some
religion's girls are not
allowed
,
as a result
, could girls not be able to
see
God in their whole life? We should be
stopped
on trusting in the
name
of Jesus,
but
believing on
ourself
could be the best way to seek God.

To
summarise
, Jesus is
only
the
name
, by which we can worship, to
make
all understand that someone is there who is looking after forgiving punishment for any wrongdoing,
but
cannot find God.
Nevertheless
, we should not be
totally
dependent on the
name
but
pay attention to
good
karma either for saving the world or respect others, which
is counted
at the
end
of our life.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that the only way to see God is through Jesus, others think that there are other ways regardless. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
373 words
6.5
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