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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and v.14

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and v. 14
Nowadays, most of the people in several countries are facing health related issues, because, of their sedentary style of living. This essay will discuss the reasons why this is happening and put forward several solutions for this issue. There are mainly two reasons for this issue. Firstly, people are pursuing ready to eat foods rather than cooking in their home. In other words, we are living in a globalised world that everyone is striving to live. Meanwhile, they do not have adequate time to cook. Consequently, they compelled to eat packet food that entails a lot of fat that is detrimental to one's health. Moreover, burgeoning fast food chains indulge people with unprecedented discounts and offers. As a result, they are allured and go for that kind of foods. For instance, In my city, a lot of food chains carved their niche and they encouraged customers with mammoth discounts. We can maintain our health with proper exercise and healthy food style. Regular exercise minimizes the risk of obesity, heart attack and other types of lifestyle diseases that are so harmful for our health. A recent study of the world health organisation suggests that, one who should exercise at least 30 minutes every day in order to stay healthy and happy. Furthermore, eating habits have a huge impact on our health. We should include fat free foods such as vegetables and fruits in our daily diet. Also fibre contained food prevents various diseases such as cancer and gastric problems. In conclusion, the main reasons for the increase in the unhealthy people are mainly their eating habits and the booming food chains all over the world. We can overcome this with proper exercise and proper dieting.
Nowadays, most of the
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people
in several countries are facing
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health
related issues,
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because
, of their sedentary style of living. This essay will discuss the reasons why this is happening and put forward several solutions for this issue.

There are
mainly
two reasons for this issue.
Firstly
,
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people
are pursuing ready to eat
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foods
rather
than cooking in their home.
In other words
, we are living in a
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globalised
world that everyone is striving to
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live
. Meanwhile, they do not have adequate time to cook.
Consequently
, they compelled to eat packet
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food
that entails
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a lot of
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fat
that is
detrimental to one's
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health
.
Moreover
, burgeoning
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fast
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food
chains indulge
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people
with unprecedented discounts and offers.
As a result
, they
are allured
and go for that kind of
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foods
.
For instance
, In my city,
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a lot of
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food
chains carved their
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niche and
they encouraged customers with mammoth discounts.

We can maintain our
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health
with proper
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exercise
and healthy
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food
style. Regular
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exercise
minimizes the
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risk
of obesity, heart attack and other types of lifestyle diseases that are
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so
harmful for our
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health
. A recent study of the world
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health
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organisation
suggests that, one who should
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exercise
at least 30 minutes every day in order to stay healthy and happy.
Furthermore
, eating habits have a huge impact on our
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health
. We should include
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fat
free
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foods
such as vegetables and fruits in our daily diet.
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Also
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fibre
contained
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food
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prevents
various diseases such as cancer and gastric problems.

In conclusion
, the main reasons for the increase in the unhealthy
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people
are
mainly
their eating habits and the booming
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food
chains all over the world. We can overcome this with proper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercise
and proper dieting.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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