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In the past, sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win a match or to break world records. These days they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous. What message does this send to young people and how does this attitude to sport affect the sports themselves?

In the history, sporting champions had to be inspired mainly by an ability to win a match or break world records. These days, they are more likely to be motivated by prise money and a chance to be famous. This is an interesting thing which happened and effected human being nowadays. The essay will firstly explore about meaning words which carries on to young generation from this situation. Secondly, the essay will explain the result of this mentality which impacted to sports themselves. First of all, It has been clearly seen that becoming a winner or successing in highest scores in not mainly important things nowadays for sportman. It seems to be a second prise for them. It is not necessary to like or having motivation as before because of the princing is valuable more than before. The chance of becoming famous means to be the opportunity to be richer people. It is drawing an opinion and attention of teenager to would like to earn money more than focusing on what they want to do. In addition, there are many drawbacks of this behaviours such as sometime they cannot focus on an exactly life goal, more stressful while scrambling for achivement their step. In conclusion, the essay has been demonstrated young generation life has been impacted by an influancer or sportman. Some midset can be tranfered to others genaration without barrier.
In the history, sporting champions had to
be inspired
mainly
by an ability to win a match or break world records. These days, they are more likely to
be motivated
by
prise
money and a chance to be
famous
. This is an interesting thing which happened and effected human being nowadays. The essay will
firstly
explore about meaning words which carries on to young generation from this situation.
Secondly
, the essay will
explain
the result of this mentality which impacted to sports themselves.

First of all
, It has been
clearly
seen
that becoming a winner or
successing
in
highest
scores in not
mainly
important
things nowadays for
sportman
. It seems to be a second
prise
for them. It is not necessary to like or having motivation as
before
because
of the
princing
is valuable more than
before
. The chance of becoming
famous
means to be the opportunity to be richer
people
. It is drawing an opinion and attention of
teenager
to would like to earn money more than focusing on what they want to do.
In addition
, there are
many
drawbacks of
this
behaviours
such as
sometime
they cannot focus on an
exactly life
goal, more stressful while scrambling for
achivement
their step.

In conclusion
, the essay has
been demonstrated
young generation life has
been impacted
by an
influancer
or
sportman
.
Some
midset
can be
tranfered
to others
genaration
without barrier.
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IELTS essay In the past, sporting champions used to be motivated primarily by the desire to win a match or to break world records. These days they are more likely to be motivated by prize money and the opportunity to be famous. What message does this send to young people and how does this attitude to sport affect the sports themselves?

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  American English
3 paragraphs
231 words
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