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in the past shopping was considered as domestic many people now a days regard it as hobby

in the past shopping was considered as domestic many people now a days regard it as hobby JoxDE
Initially buying commodities was considered a day to day activity for getting the utility products, but now many individuals believe it has fun or pleasure to shop. Although it's a stress reliever for some, but I strongly reckon that trend is not going to work long as shopping the unnecessary stuff just refers to the mere wastage of money and time. To begin with, rushing into the mall in order to get your cupboard filled up with expensive and glittery dresses, is surely a waste of money which instead would be used for other essential tasks. Spending penny only on the required materials should be the priority of every citizen. For instance, trying a dish at home rather than having an expensive oily snack at an affluent restaurant would help us hit two birds with a single stone. first, it would be healthier and secondly, pocket friendly and thirdly, it would save fuel. Furthermore, time which we just misspend is another major factor adding to the negativity of the trend. Juvenile especially, nowadays spend uselessly on the products which fascinates them even if it is of no use to them. According to recent research of NMR group, marketing sector has turned the leader of all other sectors in terms of GDP. Individuals misuse their time lavishly on purchasing rather than utilising it smartly. In conclusion, shopping to a certain extent is alright! But when turned into a hobby, it may be impractical and pointless as "excess of everything is bad". So the public needs to expend their wealth wisely.
Initially
buying commodities
was considered
a
day to day
activity for getting the utility products,
but
now
many
individuals believe it has fun or pleasure to shop. Although it's a
stress
reliever for
some
,
but
I
strongly
reckon that trend is not going to work long as shopping the unnecessary stuff
just
refers to the mere wastage of money and time.

To
begin
with, rushing into the mall in order to
get
your cupboard filled up with expensive and glittery dresses, is
surely
a waste of money which
instead
would be
used
for other essential tasks. Spending penny
only
on the required materials should be the priority of every citizen.
For instance
, trying a dish at home
rather
than having an expensive oily snack at an affluent restaurant would
help
us hit two birds with a single stone.
first
, it would be healthier and
secondly
, pocket friendly and
thirdly
, it would save fuel.

Furthermore
, time which we
just
misspend is another major factor adding to the negativity of the trend. Juvenile
especially
, nowadays spend
uselessly
on the products which fascinates them even if it is of no
use
to them. According to recent research of NMR group, marketing sector has turned the leader of all other sectors in terms of GDP. Individuals misuse their time
lavishly
on purchasing
rather
than
utilising
it
smartly
.

In conclusion
, shopping to a certain extent is alright!
But
when turned into a hobby, it may be impractical and pointless as
"
excess of everything is
bad
"
.
So
the public needs to expend their wealth
wisely
.
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IELTS essay in the past shopping was considered as domestic many people now a days regard it as hobby

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