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in the past people made better use of their free time than today. to what extent do you agree?

in the past people made better use of their free time than today. Oy2RG
Over the years, activities have changed as priorities are also different now. A number of people believe that in the previous eras, humans utilised their leisure time much more productivity when compared to nowadays. In my opinion, I fully disagree with the statement because of several reasons which I will be elaborating ahead to support my viewpoint. To begin with, on the one hand, these days, there are numerous activities which a person can do during their free time. A plethora of individuals join gym in order to become fit and consequently, become healthy. Thus, keeping oneself in good shape is one of the best activity an individual can do. Moreover, various courses are there for all the age groups which benefit them in endless ways. Kids take up dancing, singing, self-defence, sports, swimming and other classes in order to learn something new, while the adults enrol themselves in cooking, Zumba, yoga short-term programmes. Therefore, they become versatile and simultaneously, acquire a new skill as well. However, on the other hand, in the ancient years, humans did not have such vast variety of pastime task, hence all they use to do was to mingle with other people or spend time with their loved one's. Indeed, socialising is important to maintain good relations with friends and close acquaintance, nonetheless such activities are done on regular basis now as people get out of their houses and meet new faces everywhere they go. As a result, spare time is more effectively used today than before. To sum up, I disapprove with those individuals who think that in the past people used their leisure time more usefully than currently. Although earlier relationships were strengthen during free time, now they are stronger than before because of the fact that families enrol for new task together which brings them closer than ever before.
Over the years,
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activities
have
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changed
as priorities are
also
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different
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now
. A number of
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people
believe that in the previous eras, humans
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utilised
their leisure
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time
much more productivity when compared to nowadays. In my opinion, I
fully
disagree with the statement
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because
of several reasons which I will be elaborating ahead to support my viewpoint.

To
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begin
with, on the one hand, these days, there are numerous
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activities
which a person can do during their free
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time
. A plethora of individuals
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join
gym in order to become fit and
consequently
, become healthy.
Thus
, keeping oneself in
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good
shape is one of the best
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activity
an individual can do.

Moreover
, various courses are there for all the age groups which benefit them in endless ways. Kids take up dancing, singing,
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self-defence
, sports, swimming and other classes in order to learn something
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new
, while the adults enrol themselves in cooking, Zumba, yoga short-term
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programmes
.
Therefore
, they become versatile and
simultaneously
, acquire a
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new
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skill
as well
.

However
,
on the other hand
, in the ancient years, humans did not have such vast variety of pastime task,
hence
all they
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use to
do was to mingle with other
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people
or spend
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time
with their
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loved
one's.
Indeed
,
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socialising
is
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important
to maintain
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good
relations with friends and close acquaintance, nonetheless such
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activities
are done
on regular basis
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now
as
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people
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get
out of their
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houses
and
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meet
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new
faces everywhere they go.
As a result
, spare
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time
is more
effectively
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used
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today
than
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before
.

To sum up, I disapprove with those individuals who
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think
that in the past
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people
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used
their leisure
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time
more
usefully
than
currently
. Although earlier relationships were
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strengthen
during free
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time
,
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now
they are stronger than
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before
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because of the fact that
families enrol for
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new
task together which brings them closer than ever
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before
.
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IELTS essay in the past people made better use of their free time than today.

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  American English
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307 words
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