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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replacethem. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replacethem. v. 1
In this contemporary era electric cars are being popular with the pace of time rather than natural gases. Hence, it has a lot of advantages in the modern days. Therefore, I agree with this statement. The main benefits of electric cars are it is cost effective as well as environmentally friendly. Firstly, there will be no need of filling the petrol in the vehicle. So, a lot of money will be saved. We only need rechargeable batteries. These are easily available at home or any places where there is electricity. Apart from these, we tend to have savings in the maintenance because electric cars are less likely to be damaged or its parts to be replaced. For instance, we have usually heard people saying that too much money had been wasted on my car for the maintenance. I would rather have bought a new car with that money. In addition, individuals should use an electric car. Secondly, rechargeable cars can be easily coped with the environment, whereas it does not strain natural resources. But fossil fuels release different kinds of chemicalswhich are very harmful for the environment and for the human beings. It creates pollution in the air by burning this fuel. For example, in the recent times, we can see that a car that uses fuel create a lot of air pollution than electric cars. To sum up, I greatly agree that electric cars are going to be more benefits than that burned fossil fuels. Thus, people should begin to use electric cars in order to preserve pollution, peoples health and natural resources for the future.
In this contemporary era
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electric
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cars
are being popular with the pace of time
rather
than natural gases.
Hence
, it has
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a lot of
advantages in the modern days.
Therefore
, I
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agree
with this statement. The main benefits of
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electric
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cars
are it
is cost
effective
as well
as
environmentally
friendly.

Firstly
, there will be no need of filling the petrol in the vehicle.
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So
,
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a lot of
money will
be saved
. We
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only
need rechargeable batteries. These are
easily
available at home or any places where there is electricity. Apart from these, we tend to have savings in the maintenance
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because
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electric
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cars
are less likely to
be damaged
or its parts to
be replaced
.
For instance
, we have
usually
heard
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people
saying that too much money had
been wasted
on my
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car
for the maintenance. I would
rather
have
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bought
a new
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car
with that money.
In addition
, individuals should
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use
an
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electric
car.

Secondly
, rechargeable
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cars
can be
easily
coped with the environment, whereas it does not strain natural resources.
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But
fossil
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fuels
release
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different
kinds of
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chemicalswhich
are
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very
harmful for the environment and for the human beings. It creates pollution in the air by burning this
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fuel
.
For example
, in the recent times, we can
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see
that a
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car
that
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uses
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fuel
create
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a lot of
air pollution than
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electric
cars.

To sum up, I
greatly
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agree
that
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electric
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cars
are going to be more benefits than that burned fossil
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fuels
.
Thus
,
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people
should
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begin
to
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use
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electric
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cars
in order to preserve pollution, peoples health and natural resources for the future.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replacethem. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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