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In the past lecturers could teach a certain number of students in one lecture hall. With the development of new technology, it is hard to justify the reason to participate in the lecture physically and not via the Internet. Do you agree or disagree with th v.2

In the past lecturers could teach a certain number of students in one lecture hall. With the development of new technology, it is hard to justify the reason to participate in the lecture physically and not via the Internet. with th v. 2
One of the biggest problems that the world is facing today is global warming. There are numerous reasons causing the issue which including deforestation, greenhouse gas emissions and the way people live these days, and there are ways that the authorities and people could take to mitigate the problem. Some of the causes that bring up such the greatest issue are deforestation, greenhouse gas emissions and people’s lifestyles. Firstly, deforestation happens because of many matters, such as urbanization, forest fire which lessen the trees on our Earth. It is one of the problems because the less trees the forest has, the less oxygen in the air because the tree would be insufficient to absorb the carbon dioxide. The other obstacle is that the greenhouse gas emissions that give more heat to the surface of the Earth and make the glaciers melt down quickly. Lastly, we are living in a fast-paced lifestyle and a throw-away society. That means we distribute more trash to the environment and pollute the atmosphere around our ground. To tackle these issues the governments should enact laws and cooperate with organizations from all over the world to create a huge impact on people’s awareness. Which means the more we connect to tackle a problem, the better the resolution is. And laws will make people strictly follow, like stopping people drink alcohol after midnight. Besides, an individual could also do a lot to make an impact to others, for instance: clean the surrounding wherever we go and leave, throw rubbish in a right place, and plant more trees to create a greener environment. To sum up, there are several causes that cause climate change that the world is tackling these days, and there are also ways that an individual and a government could do to solve the problem. It is not an easy task and it takes immense time and effort to resolve this global issue.
One of the biggest
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problems
that the world is facing
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today
is global warming. There are numerous reasons causing the
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issue
which including deforestation, greenhouse gas emissions and the way
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people
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live
these days, and there are ways that the authorities and
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people
could take to mitigate the problem.

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Some of the
causes that bring up such the greatest
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issue
are deforestation, greenhouse gas emissions and
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people’s
lifestyles.
Firstly
, deforestation happens
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because
of
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many
matters, such as urbanization, forest fire which lessen the
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trees
on our Earth. It is one of the
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problems
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because
the less
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trees
the forest has, the less oxygen in the air
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because
the
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tree
would be insufficient to absorb the carbon dioxide. The other obstacle is that the greenhouse gas emissions that give more heat to the surface of the Earth and
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make
the glaciers melt down
quickly
.
Lastly
, we are living in a
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fast
-paced lifestyle and a throw-away society. That means we distribute more trash to the environment and pollute the atmosphere around our ground.

To tackle these
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issues
the
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governments
should enact laws and cooperate with organizations from all over the world to create a huge impact on
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people’s
awareness. Which means the more we connect to tackle a
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problem
, the better the resolution is. And laws will
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make
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people
strictly
follow, like stopping
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people
drink alcohol after midnight.
Besides
, an individual could
also
do a lot to
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make
an impact to others,
for instance
: clean the surrounding wherever we go and
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leave
, throw rubbish in a right place, and plant more
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trees
to create a greener environment.

To sum up, there are several causes that cause climate
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change
that the world is tackling these days, and there are
also
ways that an individual and a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
could do to solve the
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problem
. It is not an easy task and it takes immense time and effort to resolve this global
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issue
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay In the past lecturers could teach a certain number of students in one lecture hall. With the development of new technology, it is hard to justify the reason to participate in the lecture physically and not via the Internet. with th v. 2

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4 paragraphs
318 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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Task Achievement: 7.5
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