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In the past lecturers could teach a certain number of students in one lecture hall. With the development of new technology, it is hard to justify the reason to participate in the lecture physically and not via the internet. v.1

In the past lecturers could teach a certain number of students in one lecture hall. With the development of new technology, it is hard to justify the reason to participate in the lecture physically and not via the internet. v. 1
It is commonly thought that orators could coach a limited number of pupils in a classroom in the past. However, on the other hand, others tend to look at this practice differently that online classrooms are beneficial with the advent of modern technology. I agree with the former view because it would reap numerous benefits to students. The principal rationale behind lectures in study hall is they enable students to develop public speaking skills. When learners attend lectures in a closed hall showing their physical presence, they become active and enthusiastic with face-to-face interaction. As a result, it increases their confidence level; they get into debates to understand more about other people’s opinion, which paves a way for them to become futuristic public speakers in society. For instance, a survey conducted by the world education council illustrated traditional sessions in halls enhances the public speaking skills by changing individuals from introverts to extroverts. Another point to consider is that students will build organisational skills through classroom education. Since it demands students to be physically present, they make an effort to reach schools or institution on time, focus on working on their homework and assignments the previous day night and deliver the project work to tutors before the due date. For example, a survey conducted by the UK government shows that ninety percent of people illustrated that the conservative method of education develops the ability for students to focus the given tasks and adhere to them. To conclude, despite the fact that modern technology has several benefits owing to online classes, I strongly agree with the traditional mode of teaching because of its manifold benefits to individuals on building public speaking and organisational skills.
It is
commonly
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thought
that orators could coach a limited number of pupils in a classroom in the past.
However
,
on the other hand
, others tend to look at this practice
differently
that online classrooms are beneficial with the advent of modern technology. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the former view
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it would reap numerous benefits to students.

The principal rationale behind lectures in study hall is they enable
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students
to develop
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
speaking
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skills
. When learners attend lectures in a closed hall showing their physical presence, they become active and enthusiastic with face-to-face interaction.
As a result
, it increases their confidence level; they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
into debates to understand more about other
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people
’s opinion, which paves a way for them to become futuristic
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public
speakers in society.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the world education council illustrated traditional sessions in halls enhances the
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public
speaking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
by changing individuals from introverts to extroverts.

Another point to consider is that
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students
will build
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organisational
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skills
through classroom education. Since it demands
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students
to be
physically
present, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
an effort to reach schools or institution on time, focus on working on their homework and assignments the previous day night and deliver the project work to tutors
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before
the due date.
For example
, a survey conducted by the UK
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government
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shows
that ninety percent of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
illustrated that the conservative method of education develops the ability for
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students
to focus the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
tasks and adhere to them.

To conclude
, despite the fact that modern technology has several benefits owing to online classes, I
strongly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the traditional mode of teaching
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of its manifold benefits to individuals on building
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
speaking and
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisational' is British English.
organisational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In the past lecturers could teach a certain number of students in one lecture hall. With the development of new technology, it is hard to justify the reason to participate in the lecture physically and not via the internet. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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