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In the opinion of some people, internet has narrowed the gap among people in the world by increasing social interaction.

In the opinion of some people, internet has narrowed the gap among people in the world by increasing social interaction. k5kKM
In this modern world, technology is advancing day by day. Internet is also one such invention of technology which has become the most powerful tool in the world today as it is drawing the people closer. With the help of the internet, the way people used to socialise with each other has changed and improved to a much greater extent. To begin with, internet has brought various benefits to people letting them to socialise more. It has provided excellent social media platforms such as Facebook, Twitter and others which have just revolutionised the way people used to communicate in the earlier times. Moreover, sending messages using internet has become easier, convenient and economical. Otherwise, people had to wait a lot for sending or receiving messages. For example, people nowadays can send instant messages on Facebook in just no time. On the other hand, there are several drawbacks of using the internet and its effect on social interaction. One of the drawbacks is that people do not interact face to face. Hence, social interaction has been limited to online communication. In addition to this, people have become addicted to the internet to this much extent that they suffer from health related problems such as poor eye-sight, back ache and others. For instance, it has been found that people often use internet devices, being as comfortable as possible, lying on the bed which affects their body posture causing back ache. Conclusively, it can be said that though internet has benefitted the mankind in several aspects by reducing the distance among people but it has also led to the birth of new problems related to health and others.
In this modern world, technology is advancing day by day. Internet is
also
one such invention of technology which has become the most powerful tool in the world
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today
as it is drawing the
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people
closer. With the
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help
of the internet, the way
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people
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used
to
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socialise
with each
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other
has
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changed
and
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improved
to a much greater extent.

To
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begin
with, internet has brought various benefits to
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people
letting them to
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socialise
more. It has provided excellent social media platforms such as Facebook, Twitter
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and others
which have
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just
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revolutionised
the way
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people
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used
to communicate in the earlier times.
Moreover
, sending messages using internet has become easier, convenient and economical.
Otherwise
,
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people
had to wait a lot for sending or receiving messages.
For example
,
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people
nowadays can
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send
instant messages on Facebook in
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just
no time.

On the
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other
hand, there are several drawbacks of using the internet and its effect on social interaction. One of the drawbacks is that
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people
do not interact face to face.
Hence
, social interaction has
been limited
to online communication.
In addition
to this,
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people
have become addicted to the internet to this much extent that they suffer from health related problems such as poor eye-sight, back ache
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and others
.
For instance
, it has
been found
that
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people
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often
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use
internet devices, being as comfortable as possible, lying on the bed which affects their body posture causing back ache.

Conclusively
, it can
be said
that though internet has
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benefitted
the mankind in several aspects by reducing the distance among
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people
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but
it has
also
led to the birth of new problems related to health
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and others
.
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IELTS essay In the opinion of some people, internet has narrowed the gap among people in the world by increasing social interaction.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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