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In the modern world, it is often believed that as different established rules and laws enforce people to obey and lead a simple unproblematic life, the absence of those regulations can contribute to a social disaster.

In the modern world, it is often believed that as different established rules and laws enforce people to obey and lead a simple unproblematic life, the absence of those regulations can contribute to a social disaster. l7L0Q
In the modern world, it is often believed that as different established rules and laws enforce people to obey and lead a simple unproblematic life, the absence of those regulations can contribute to a social disaster. I totally support this statement and i will discuss my reasons for an agreement in the following essay. To begin with, governments of all countries implement regulations only for a betterment of human conditions. Indeed, it is impossible to imagine in what horrible situation a country might be found if there were no provided rules about throwing rubbish on the street. For example, some Asian countries like Singapore generally having the strict rules, and if person is caught casually throwing a chewing gum or any wastage on the street, they will be punished and fined for 200 dollars. Such massive but fair restrictions ensure that our planet stays safe and is not being polluted even worse. Moreover, the lack of any social rule in society may transform humans into some kind of arrogant and impolite creatures, who will feel a power to do anything they desire. In other word, cherished freedom is crucial for mankind, as many people who are unemployed or simply not satisfied with their lives may start robbing shops and other citizens in public transports. For instance, last year during the "Black life Matters" movement many angry Americans had chosen to ignore the law completely, that resulted in many human deaths due to difference in race and beliefs, and many local shops were vandalized or entirely broken. If laws and rules were completely absent during that time, the USA might have faced even more tragically circumstances and be on the verge of financial crises right now. In conclusion, even though freedom is something many people aspire to achieve, it is a major thing to remember that we live in the balanced society and in order to maintain a growing prosperity and co-exist in peace, it is essential to comply with the rules. It is something every person should think about if they ever have some doubts about the importance of modern rules.
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will discuss my reasons for an agreement in the following essay.

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with,
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governments
of all countries implement regulations
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only
for a betterment of human conditions.
Indeed
, it is impossible to imagine in what horrible situation a country might
be found
if there were no provided
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rules
about throwing rubbish on the street.
For example
,
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some
Asian countries like Singapore
generally
having the strict
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rules
, and if person
is caught
casually
throwing a chewing gum or any wastage on the street, they will
be punished
and fined for 200 dollars. Such massive
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but
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fair
restrictions ensure that our planet stays safe and is not
being polluted
even worse.

Moreover
, the lack of any social
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rule
in society may transform humans into
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some
kind of arrogant and impolite creatures, who will feel a power to do anything they desire. In other word, cherished freedom is crucial for mankind, as
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many
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people
who
are unemployed
or
simply
not satisfied with their
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lives
may
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start
robbing shops and other citizens in public transports.
For instance
, last year during the
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Black life Matters
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movement
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many
angry Americans had chosen to
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ignore
the law completely, that resulted in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
human deaths due to difference in race and beliefs, and
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many
local shops
were vandalized
or
entirely
broken. If laws and
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rules
were completely absent during that time, the USA might have faced even more
tragically
circumstances and be on the verge of financial crises right
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now
.

In conclusion
,
even though
freedom is something
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many
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people
aspire to achieve, it is a major thing to remember that we
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live
in the balanced society and in order to maintain a growing prosperity and co-exist in peace, it is essential to comply with the
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rules
. It is something every person should
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think
about if they ever have
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some
doubts about the importance of modern
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rules
.

IELTS essay In the modern world, it is often believed that as different established rules and laws enforce people to obey and lead a simple unproblematic life, the absence of those regulations can contribute to a social disaster.

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