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In the modern world it is no longer necessary to use animals for food clothing or medicine To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

In the modern world it is no longer necessary to use animals for food clothing or medicine v. 1
In the most recent years, the amount of exotic food consumed goes higher and higher in growth in many nations. Indeed, people tend to buy imported food instead of domestic food. There are a number of reasons for this trend and measures could be taken to set to grow for indigenous food. There are several good grounds that have led to the increasing consumption of foreign food. One of these is that many consumers believe that imported food is safer than domestic food. They claim that exotic food is cultivated in a better environment which is unnecessary to use pesticides or chemicals to accelerate crops. Another reason is that imported food has better quality than food which is produced locally. In other words, foreign food is well selected before being exported to a nation and the state would not allow the crates of low-quality food to be imported. However, the trend explained above would adversely affect people who produce as well as selling domestic food and there are several measures that the local authorities would do to help people in need. The first solution is that the state should make an attempt to put a constraint on the amount of food imported. By this method, the demand for local food could positively thrive by the rarity of foreign food. Another measure is by using one of the redeeming qualities of domestic food is cheap, the authorities could make a sales campaign to help local firms attempt to satisfy their customers’ demands. For example, Fahasa, the biggest bookstore in Vietnam, they make numerous sales every year, but they rarely discount for the foreign products, and each time this campaign happened, the number of Vietnamese books sold were remarkably increased. In conclusion, the fact that the demand for imported food has increased and the reduction of producing food locally is attributable to its safety and its high quality. This can be handled by restricting the amount of food imported and making a sales campaign.
In the most recent years, the amount of exotic
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food
consumed goes higher and higher in growth in
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many
nations.
Indeed
,
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people
tend to
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buy
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imported
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food
instead
of
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domestic
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food
. There are a number of reasons for this trend and measures could
be taken
to set to grow for indigenous food.

There are several
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good
grounds that have led to the increasing consumption of
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foreign
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food
. One of these is that
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many
consumers believe that
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imported
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food
is safer than
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domestic
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food
. They claim that exotic
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food
is cultivated
in a better environment which is unnecessary to
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use
pesticides or chemicals to accelerate crops. Another reason is that
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imported
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food
has better quality than
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food
which
is produced
locally
.
In other words
,
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foreign
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food
is well selected
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before
being exported
to a nation and the state would not
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allow
the crates of low-quality
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food
to
be imported
.

However
, the trend
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explained
above would
adversely
affect
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people
who produce
as well
as selling
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domestic
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food
and there are several measures that the local authorities would do to
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help
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people
in need. The
first
solution is that the state should
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make
an attempt to put a constraint on the amount of
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food
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imported
. By this method, the demand for local
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food
could
positively
thrive by the rarity of
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foreign
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food
. Another measure is by using one of the redeeming qualities of
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domestic
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food
is
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cheap
, the authorities could
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make
a sales campaign to
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help
local firms attempt to satisfy their customers’ demands.
For example
,
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Fahasa
, the biggest bookstore in Vietnam, they
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make
numerous sales every year,
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but
they rarely discount for the
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foreign
products, and each time this campaign happened, the number of Vietnamese books sold were
remarkably
increased.

In conclusion
, the fact that the demand for
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imported
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food
has increased and the reduction of producing
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food
locally
is attributable to its safety and its high quality. This can
be handled
by restricting the amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
imported
and making a sales campaign.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay In the modern world it is no longer necessary to use animals for food clothing or medicine v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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