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In the last century when a human astronaut first arrived on the Moon he said: “It is a big step for mankind”. But some people think it makes little difference to our daily life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Almost every day we read something in the papers about the latest exciting developments in the space race. Some people may argue that our ability to explore the moon was a significant achievement of the twentieth century while others argue that this has not impacted our lives at all. Both points of view have their merits as will now be explained. To embark with, the technology that put men on the moon, launched space crafts and will build a space station has found its way into everyday life on earth. The common smoke detector used in homes was first prepared for space shuttles as a warning system. For instance, Computer bar codes in retail stores, lightweight materials used for helmets and sporting materials were all first developed as part of space research. Moreover, Space technology has provided many benefits to the medical field as well. Pace makers are used to treat cardiovascular diseases as well as remote monitoring devices for intensive care patients are few applications of space technology providing daily benefits in hospitals, offices and homes. To exemplify, CT scans, Magnetic resonance imaging (MRI) and ultrasound techniques were originated in NASA to make global measurements of surface changes using advanced radar imaging. On the other hand, it can be said that the money spent on research, space ships and training of astronauts has been wasted because we have not benefited in terms of our standard of living, while this money could have been used in more urgent problems, such as saving poor people who may die of malnutrition, starvation, or war. For example, by subsidizing healthcare sector, many more people could get medical coverage. To conclude, although the benefits of exploring the moon cannot be said to be significant when considering the standard of our lives, I definitely believe that exploring space is a big leap for mankind.
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may argue that our ability to explore the moon was a significant achievement of the twentieth century while others argue that this has not impacted our
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lives
at all. Both points of view have their merits as will
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space crafts
and will build a
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station has found its way into everyday life on earth. The common smoke detector
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used
in homes was
first
prepared for
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space
shuttles as a warning system.
For instance
, Computer bar codes in retail stores, lightweight materials
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used
for helmets and sporting materials were all
first
developed as part of
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research.

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,
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technology has provided
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many
benefits to the medical field
as well
.
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Pace makers
are
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used
to treat cardiovascular diseases
as well
as remote monitoring devices for intensive care patients are few applications of
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space
technology providing daily benefits in hospitals, offices and homes. To exemplify, CT scans, Magnetic resonance imaging (MRI) and ultrasound techniques
were originated
in NASA to
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make
global measurements of surface
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changes
using advanced radar imaging.

On the other hand
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be said
that the money spent on research,
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space ships
and training of astronauts has
been wasted
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because
we have not benefited in terms of our standard of living, while this money could have been
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used
in more urgent problems, such as saving poor
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people
who may
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die
of malnutrition, starvation, or war.
For example
, by subsidizing healthcare sector,
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many
more
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people
could
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get
medical coverage.

To conclude
, although the benefits of exploring the moon cannot
be said
to be significant when considering the standard of our
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lives
, I definitely believe that exploring
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space
is a
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big
leap for mankind.
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IELTS essay In the last century when a human astronaut first arrived on the Moon he said: “It is a big step for mankind”. But some people think it makes little difference to our daily life.

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5 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
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