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It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people perceive alteration as more advantageous to make life enthusiastic than maintaining stability with the same routines, which have become boring and predictable. This essay will suggest that by bringing us a new lifestyle and learning opportunities, the benefits of changes outweigh the drawbacks which are mostly associated with stress-related issues. On the one hand, few things are so painful to the human mind as an ad hoc and haphazard change. In society, some people refrain from alteration because of its side-effects on their psychology. Whenever individuals are forced to change their lifestyles or jobs, they are likely to experience stress. The time to learn and adapt to such changes will take too long for some. That is to say, when people alter a job, they may need to learn new skills and get to know new colleagues. They think not all improvements are important to a case, and others might think it is a one-sided concept. This is particularly true for those people who are used to doing so on a routine basis. By contrast, if they stay inert, they may feel more comfortable and confident. On the other hand, holding onto something good for some people may be the major reason why they do not have something better. Firstly, any situation can be an opportunity to learn and grow as a person by discovering new insights into different aspects of their life and reach integrity. Secondly, in no way is the significance of alteration a way of boosting creativity to be underestimated. With the power of change, people may gain the ability to think outside the box, thus finding creative solutions to problems. When a person gets a new job in an organization, he will learn new talents that are used there and about his new company's culture. In addition, by adjusting improvements to the course of their lives, people can expand their horizons for personal development. For instance, it is a tough choice to relocate and adjust one's home, but a satisfying step later because of the advantages of getting more options abroad. Similarly, they learn about their functionality and how to run them as customers buy new products. By comparison, they will not be able to learn these new trends and proficiencies, if they do not bother themselves and do not change anything. To summarize, from my vantage point, by enhancing creativity and redounding chances to acquire knowledge, advantages predominate negative effects, which are generally related to anxiety and depression. Some alterations may look negative on the surface but we will soon realize that changes which intimidate us at first may later enable something new to emerge.
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perceive
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as more advantageous to
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life enthusiastic than maintaining stability with the same routines, which have become boring and predictable. This essay will suggest that by bringing us a
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new
lifestyle and learning opportunities, the benefits of
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changes
outweigh the drawbacks which are
mostly
associated with
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stress
-related issues.

On the one hand, few things are
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painful to the human mind as an ad hoc and haphazard
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change
. In society,
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people
refrain from
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alteration
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because
of its
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side-effects
on their psychology. Whenever individuals
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to
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change
their lifestyles or jobs, they are likely to experience
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stress
. The time to
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learn
and adapt to such
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changes
will take too long for
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some
.
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to say, when
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people
alter a job, they may need to
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learn
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new
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skills
and
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get
to know
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colleagues. They
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think
not all improvements are
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important
to a case,
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and others
might
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it is a one-sided concept. This is
particularly
true for those
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people
who are
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used
to doing
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so
on a routine basis. By contrast, if they stay inert, they may feel more comfortable and confident.

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, holding onto something
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good
for
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some
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people
may be the major reason why they do not have something better.
Firstly
, any situation can be an opportunity to
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learn
and grow as a person by discovering
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new
insights into
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different
aspects of their life and reach integrity.
Secondly
, in no way is the significance of
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alteration
a way of boosting creativity to
be underestimated
. With the power of
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change
,
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people
may gain the ability to
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think
outside the box,
thus
finding creative solutions to problems. When a person
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gets
a
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new
job in an organization, he will
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learn
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new
talents that are
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used
there and about his
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new
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company
's culture.
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, by adjusting improvements to the course of their
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lives
,
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people
can expand their horizons for personal development.
For instance
, it is a tough choice to relocate and adjust one's home,
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a satisfying step later
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because
of the advantages of getting more options abroad.
Similarly
, they
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learn
about their functionality and how to run them as customers
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buy
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new
products. By comparison, they will not be able to
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learn
these
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new
trends and proficiencies, if they do not bother themselves and do not
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change
anything.

To summarize
, from my vantage point, by enhancing creativity and redounding chances to acquire knowledge, advantages predominate
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negative
effects, which are
generally
related to anxiety and depression.
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alterations
may look
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on the surface
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but
we will
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soon
realize that
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changes
which intimidate us at
first
may later enable something
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new
to emerge.
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IELTS essay It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
442 words
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