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In the future, people tend to update news via internet instead of spending money to buy printed newspapers or books. Personally, I believe that we gain more than we lose from this trend.

In the future, people tend to update news via internet instead of spending money to buy printed newspapers or books. Personally, I believe that we gain more than we lose from this trend. Ow3Jj
In the future, people tend to update news via internet instead of spending money to buy printed newspapers or books. Personally, I believe that we gain more than we lose from this trend. On the one hand, there are certain high risk associated with reading online without paying. Firstly and foremost, it is unsuspecting for people to read the misable and wrong true. In fact, citizens now have freedoom of choice to do what they want, even what kind of tool to read news, thus they are able to access unofficial newspapers with permission of government via online news. Secondly, it is a huge issue for employers who work for newspaper and book fields. Obviously, it is undeniable that the less people reading printed newspapers or books the more companies have to cut down their employments. Utimately, worker face to lost job opportunities, even finance burden. Despite the aforementioned drawbacks reading online are able bring us a huge benefits. Firstly, residents can update news in the more much easier and quicker ways. Particularly, breaking news play an important role for all citizens along with authorities during Covid-19 pandemic. Furthermore, thanks to reading hot news through internet, it can be improved citizens knowledge not only in our country but also around the world. A number of event in the world could be conveyed via social networking, it is extremely convenient for people in the world exchange culture and education. In conclusion, reading online newspapers or books become more prevelent nowadays. I strongly agree that this trend can give us a numerous benefits in term of education, culture, health and other aspect of life.
In the future,
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people
tend to update
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news
via internet
instead
of spending money to
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buy
printed
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newspapers
or
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books
.
Personally
, I believe that we gain more than we lose from this trend.

On the one hand, there are certain high
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risk
associated with
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reading
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online
without paying.
Firstly
and foremost, it is unsuspecting for
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people
to read the
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misable
and
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wrong
true. In fact, citizens
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now
have
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freedoom
of choice to do what they want, even what kind of tool to read
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news
,
thus
they are able to access unofficial
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newspapers
with permission of
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government
via
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online
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news
.
Secondly
, it is a huge issue for employers who work for
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newspaper
and
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book
fields.
Obviously
, it is undeniable that the
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less
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people
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reading
printed
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newspapers
or
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books
the more
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companies
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have to
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cut
down their employments.
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Utimately
, worker face to lost job opportunities, even finance burden.

Despite the aforementioned drawbacks
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reading
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online
are
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able bring
us a huge
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benefits
.
Firstly
, residents can update
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news
in the more much easier and quicker ways.
Particularly
, breaking
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news
play an
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important
role for all citizens along with authorities during Covid-19 pandemic.
Furthermore
, thanks to
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reading
hot
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news
through internet, it can be
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improved
citizens knowledge not
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only
in our country
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but
also
around the world. A number of
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event
in the world could
be conveyed
via social networking, it is
extremely
convenient for
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people
in the world exchange culture and education.

In conclusion
,
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reading
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online
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newspapers
or
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books
become more
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prevelent
nowadays. I
strongly
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agree
that this trend can give us a numerous benefits in term of education, culture, health and other aspect of life.
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IELTS essay In the future, people tend to update news via internet instead of spending money to buy printed newspapers or books. Personally, I believe that we gain more than we lose from this trend.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
5.5
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