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Celebrity news or ordinary people news

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One of the trendy title of media is about lives and relationship of celebrities like actor singers and football players, instead of spending more time to report the lives of ordinary people. In the following we will try to choose that which one has more advantage for people, report news about celebrities or anything else. About disadvantage of publishing news about celebrities lives, we should mention that, it shows people what they don’t have and in some cases what they cant achieve. Some body believe it may push people to work hard for their dreams however i think many dreams of ordinary people are not achievable. Another point is, although some of the celebrities don’t experience any problem about that, people know about their personal life but many of them don’t like to share their life and shared with popularity. About advantages of that, we can mention that it helps celebrities advocators to follow them and it cause to prepare more chances for celebrities to progress. On the other hand, ordinary people need daily news about rate of changing prices, political decisions, climate change and weather news and they seems much more usefull than news about private life. in conclucion, reporting news about actors, football players and … can be part of our daily news but it seems it is not as applicable as news about ordinary people and their needs.
One of the trendy title of media is about
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lives
and relationship of
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celebrities
like actor singers and football players,
instead
of spending more time to report the
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lives
of
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ordinary
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people
. In the following we will try to choose that which one has more advantage for
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people
, report
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news
about
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celebrities
or anything else. About disadvantage of publishing
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news
about
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celebrities
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lives
, we should mention that, it
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shows
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people
what they don’t have and in
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some
cases what they
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cant
achieve.
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Some body
believe it may push
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people
to work
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hard
for their dreams
however
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i
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think
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many
dreams of
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ordinary
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people
are not achievable. Another point is, although
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some of the
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celebrities
don’t experience any problem about that,
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people
know about their personal life
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but
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many
of them don’t like to share their life and shared with popularity. About advantages of that, we can mention that it
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helps
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celebrities
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advocators
to follow them and it
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cause
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to prepare
more chances for
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celebrities
to progress.
On the other hand
,
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ordinary
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people
need daily
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news
about rate of changing prices, political decisions, climate
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change
and weather
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news and
they
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seems
much more
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usefull
than
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news
about private life.
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in
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conclucion
, reporting
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news
about actors, football players and … can be part of our daily
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news
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but
it seems it is not as applicable as
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news
about
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ordinary
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people
and their needs.
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IELTS essay Celebrity news or ordinary people news

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
231 words
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5.0
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