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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Wk05
Spending holidays in abroad will be preferred by a number of people than in their own country. Even though, there are two reasons I can state, due to which people may choose to go on vacation in their own country, but in my opinion, trend for enjoying vacations in other countries than own, will increase in future. On the one hand, some people vote for planning vacations in own country because of two reasons. Firstly, local tourism gets promoted and benefited by this approach. Moreover, it generates significant revenue for the country. Secondly, citizens of the country can get to learn more about their own traditions and culture. For instance, Indian government is putting emphasise on the people to consider utilizing their vacation time in India. Many states accros the country have invested milllions to aware the public about local tousism benefits. Nevertheless, I believe that vacations to be spent abroad will be choosen by people more and more, because there are plenty of reasons that fortify this belief. We are offered with opportunities to learn and understand foreign language and culture. This has become an important aspect in contemperary phase of globalization. Moreover, Foreign countries offer exotic places where holidays can be spend with great fun. Also, people get to experience different weather, surroundings, food, cities and natural places all over the globe. To illustrate, flights are getting cheaper, and as a consequence, people like to follow the trend of spending vacations abroad. To conclude, Despite of having few advantages of spending vacations in own country, there are numerous reasons that will make people travel abroad for holidays in future.
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people
may choose to go on
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vacation
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,
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in other
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, will increase
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in future
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On the one hand,
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people
vote for planning
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vacations
in
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own
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country
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of two
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reasons
.
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, local tourism
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gets
promoted and benefited by this approach.
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, it generates significant revenue for the
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.
Secondly
, citizens of the
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country
can
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get
to learn more about their
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traditions and culture.
For instance
, Indian
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government
is putting
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emphasise
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people
to consider utilizing their
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vacation
time in India.
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states
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have invested
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milllions
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tousism
benefits.

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abroad will be
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more and more,
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that fortify this belief. We
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important
aspect in
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contemperary
phase of globalization.
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offer exotic places where holidays can be
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spend
with great fun.
Also
,
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people
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get
to experience
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different
weather, surroundings, food, cities and natural places all over the globe. To illustrate, flights are getting cheaper, and as a consequence,
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people
like to follow the trend of spending
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vacations
abroad.

To conclude
,
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Despite of
having few advantages of spending
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vacations
in
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own
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country
, there are numerous
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reasons
that will
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people
travel abroad for holidays
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in future
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IELTS essay In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday.

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