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In the contemporary world, living together with your partner before marriage has become a tradition. The young generation think of marriage as a big responsibility

In the contemporary world, living together with your partner before marriage has become a tradition. The young generation think of marriage as a big responsibility 757n6
In the contemporary world, living together with your partner before marriage has become a tradition. The young generation think of marriage as a big responsibility and believe in taking decisions wisely after analyzing all the pros and cons. As I belong to the same generation and understand the complexities of relationships hence, I strongly agree with the statement that live-in-relationship should be promoted before giving the life-long commitments. In the western culture, staying together under one roof without any legal association is very common. On the other hand, the majority of the Indian population consider it as non-ethical and against our culture. They are of opinion that cohabitation may lead to the end of a bond. In my view, spending maximum time together will give better understanding of the other person, and we will be able to know the negative sides as well. A person might pretend for few hours but doing it for too long is not possible. Furthermore, it also helps in self introspection as we get to know more about our capabilities of adjusting with others apart from family. People tend to build a special physical, mental and emotional bond with their better halves. In addition to that, if we are unable to develop any connection with the person even after living together then it will be fruitful for us as we cannot spend whole life with whom we didn't feel any affection. This can also be a solution for curbing the increased divorce rates problems. For instance, couples who meet through the arranged set up and decide to get married after 2 or 3 meets may face issues in adjusting or settling up with their partners after marriage as there will be no comfort level between them and might end up in separation. While couples who were already living together will be able to cope with the difficulties in much better ways. To conclude, I would like to acknowledge that living together is the best way of knowing people. Hence, before tying knots it is crucial that we know the person with whom we are planning to spend the rest of our lives rather than marrying an unknown person.
In the contemporary world,
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living
together with your partner
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before
marriage has become a tradition. The young generation
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think
of marriage as a
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big
responsibility and believe in taking decisions
wisely
after analyzing all the pros and cons. As I belong to the same generation and understand the complexities of relationships
hence
, I
strongly
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agree
with the statement that
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live
-in-relationship should
be promoted
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before
giving the life-long commitments.

In the western culture, staying together under one roof without any legal association is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
common.
On the other hand
, the majority of the Indian population consider it as non-ethical and against our culture. They are of opinion that cohabitation may lead to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of a bond. In my view, spending maximum time together will give better understanding of the other
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person
, and we will be able to know the
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negative
sides
as well
. A
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person
might pretend for few hours
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but
doing it for too long is not possible.
Furthermore
, it
also
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helps
in self introspection as we
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get
to know more about our capabilities of adjusting with others apart from family.
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People
tend to build a special physical, mental and emotional bond with their better halves.

In addition
to that, if we are unable to develop any connection with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
even after
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living
together then it will be fruitful for us as we cannot spend whole life with whom we didn't feel any affection. This can
also
be a solution for curbing the increased divorce rates problems.
For instance
, couples who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
through the arranged set up and decide to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
married after 2 or 3 meets may face issues in adjusting or settling up with their partners after marriage as there will be no comfort level between them and might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up in separation.
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While
couples who were already
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living
together will be able to cope with the difficulties in much better ways.

To conclude
, I would like to acknowledge that
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living
together is the best way of knowing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
Hence
,
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before
tying knots it is crucial that we know the
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person
with whom we are planning to spend the rest of our
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lives
rather
than marrying an unknown
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person
.
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IELTS essay In the contemporary world, living together with your partner before marriage has become a tradition. The young generation think of marriage as a big responsibility

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363 words
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