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In the contemporary world. Media spread widely between teenagers and adults. Most individuals addicted to it. And it is difficult to escape it. It has many drawbacks in our lives.Following paragraphs I would cast light my position.

In the contemporary world. Media spread widely between teenagers and adults. Most individuals addicted to it. And it is difficult to escape it. It has many drawbacks in our lives. Following paragraphs I would cast light my position. Kyq73
Nevertheless, media for instance, internet and other applications Facebook, instagram, Twitter, WhatsApp, are becoming more common. It has more outweights for children. We surf the internet and we spend our valuable times for it. Without knowing it is harmful our studies. Admittedly technology brings lots of helth problems for example eyesight problems and obesity. When we surf the internet suddenly we come across different kinds of news and data. Furthermore we did not know these kinds of information should be fake or not. Our society rely on everything when they see or hear news by someone. Government should prohibit sending fake news to people By doing these, we can get reliable data. It is irrefutable fact that more parents should investigate their children. Wheather children use social networks useful way or not. It also cause time consuming. At night it is a time keep in touch with friends. By way of conclusion, l once again reform my position. We stayed under pressure by using social media. And also it is difficult to escape this situation
Nevertheless
, media
for instance
, internet and other applications Facebook,
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instagram
, Twitter, WhatsApp, are becoming more common. It has more
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outweights
for children. We surf the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
internet and
we spend our valuable times for it. Without
The comma is probably missing here: "knowing, it".
knowing it
is harmful our studies.
Admittedly
technology brings lots of
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helth
problems
for example
eyesight problems and obesity. When we surf the internet
suddenly
we
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come
across
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different
kinds of news and data.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Furthermore
we did not know these kinds of information should be fake or not. Our society rely on everything when they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
or hear news by someone.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
should prohibit sending fake news to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
By doing these, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
reliable data. It is irrefutable fact that more parents should investigate their children.
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Wheather
children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
social networks useful way or not. It
also
Did you mean "causes"?
cause
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
time consuming
. At
The comma is probably missing here: "night, it".
night it
is a time
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
in touch with friends. By way of conclusion, l once again reform my position. We stayed under pressure by using social media. And
also
it is difficult to escape this
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
situation

IELTS essay In the contemporary world. Media spread widely between teenagers and adults. Most individuals addicted to it. And it is difficult to escape it. It has many drawbacks in our lives. Following paragraphs I would cast light my position.

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174 words
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