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Choose university for Taro who has requirements about cost, facilities

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Australia is a place for international students, which specialize in IT. Taro is Japanese student who wants to study about IT in Australia. Cost is important to him. He would prefer a small university with good services for international students. Combine simple sentences However, each university has missing a word own strengths and it is difficult no opinion for Taro to choose the most suitable. So this research report examines three universities in Victoria, namely the Universiry of Melbourne (UM), Monash University (MU) and Federation University (FUA). It compares them with respect to fees, international students numbers and support and recreation facilities. All three universities differ in relation to tuition fees and living costs. The cost fees at UM is the most expensive. Whereas FU has the lowest fees of $71, 100 per year, or $213, 300 to complete. The living cost at UM is high while the living cost at MU and FU is moderate and low respectively. There are similarties and differences between the universities in regard to the number of students and student services. FUA is the smallest university, which has 21, 000 students with 25% being non academic international students. Although MU has 73, 000 students, 26% of MU’s pupil are international students. All of them have much in common about the student services. For example, they offer academic support, student advisors. Moreover, FU also has Cultural & welfare support and _____? ? ? The recreation facilities at three universities are similar and different. All of them has more over 20 sport and recreation club, sport field, sport and aquatic centre. However, UM has the most facilities with more over 60. On the other hand, MU ranks 2nd with more over 50 facilities. While UM and FU have sport hall and athletics track, MU has nothing. In conclusion, three universities have advantages and disadvantage for Taro. UM has more sport and recreation clubs than other universities, but the cost is article highest. On the other hand, the facilities of FUA is not as much as UM and MU but it fit the Taro’s demand wrong word. Moreover, FUA has the cheapest tuition fees and it is also the smallest university. For these reason, i think FUA is likely to suit for Taro.
Australia is a place for
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international
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students
, which specialize in IT. Taro
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is Japanese
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student
who wants to study about IT in Australia.
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Cost
is
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important
to him. He would prefer a
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small
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university
with
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good
services for
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international
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students
. Combine simple sentences
However
, each
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university
has missing a word
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own
strengths and it is difficult no opinion for Taro to choose the most suitable.
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So
this research report examines three
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universities
in Victoria,
namely
the
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Universiry
of Melbourne (UM), Monash
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University
(MU) and Federation
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University
(
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FUA
). It compares them with respect to
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fees
,
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international
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students
numbers and support and
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recreation
facilities.

All three
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universities
differ in relation to tuition
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fees
and living
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costs
. The
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cost
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fees
at UM is the most expensive. Whereas
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FU
has the lowest
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fees
of $71, 100 per year, or $213, 300 to complete. The living
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cost
at UM is high while the living
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cost
at MU and
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FU
is moderate and low
respectively
.

There are
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similarties
and differences between the
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universities
in regard to the number of
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students
and
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student
services.
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FUA
is the smallest
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university
, which has 21, 000
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students
with 25% being
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non academic
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international
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students
. Although MU has 73, 000
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students
, 26% of MU’s pupil are
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international
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students
. All of them have much in common about the
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student
services.
For example
, they offer academic support,
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student
advisors.
Moreover
,
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FU
also
has Cultural & welfare support and _____? ? ?

The
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recreation
facilities at three
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universities
are similar and
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different
. All of them has more over 20
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sport
and
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club,
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sport
field,
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sport
and aquatic
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centre
.
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, UM has the most facilities with more over 60.
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, MU ranks 2nd with more over 50 facilities. While UM and
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FU
have
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hall and athletics
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track
, MU has nothing.

In conclusion
, three
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universities
have advantages and disadvantage for Taro. UM has more
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sport
and
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recreation
clubs than other
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universities
,
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but
the
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cost
is article highest.
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, the facilities of
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FUA
is not as much as UM and MU
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but
it fit the Taro’s demand
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word.
Moreover
,
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FUA
has the cheapest tuition
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fees
and it is
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the smallest
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university
. For these reason,
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i
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think
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FUA
is likely to suit for Taro.
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IELTS essay Choose university for Taro who has requirements about cost, facilities

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
376 words
6.0
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