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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this. Give reasons for your answer and indicate any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience?

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this. 8wjB
In thus, Day and age some countries youngsters were encouraged to work or travel for a year in between finishing high standards and starting university studies. First, In my point of view in this modern world were adults are found of traveling around the world. However most of the young people would like to move around the earth. So many of them plan the trip in between the high school also these is the most valuable age to learning new things from the society itself. Here the young adults mostly plan the journey with there fellow friends to know new lessons from the surroundings. For example the younger generation like to spend their time aro by visiting hills and the rivers to feel the life of nature.
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, Day and age
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countries youngsters
were encouraged
to work or travel for a year in between finishing high standards and starting university studies.

First
, In my point of view in this modern world were adults
are found
of traveling around the world.
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However
most of the young
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people
would like to
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move
around the earth.
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So
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many
of them plan the trip in between the high school
also
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these is
the most valuable age to learning new things from the society itself. Here the young adults
mostly
plan the journey with
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there
fellow friends to know new lessons from the surroundings.
For example
the younger generation like to spend their time
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aro
by visiting hills and the rivers to feel the life of nature.

IELTS essay In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.

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