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Most societies has its homeless people.some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money.

As we all know every country has a number of homeless peoples, and they do have some basic needs to survive. consequently they need food to feed their belly, clothes to wear and shelter is the necessary thing for them. So I believe that giving cash to them is not abundance to tackle these problems in long term. If we gave them specific amount of money they spend this cash on buying food and clothes. With this limited cash they wouldn't fulfill their all needs inpermanent way. Although, we should give them a good job with that they can fulfill their all needs. When they have jobbed they can earn money on weekky or monthly bases regularly. In this way they tackle their problems more effectively rather than giving money to them. Hence, in my perspective giving money to homeless wouldn't change their lives permanently.

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