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In some countries students pay their college or university fee while in some other the government pay for them.

In some countries students pay their college or university fee while in some other the government pay for them. j8Jky
It is common that students pay for their own tuition fees in most of the countries, still, some nations subsidize almost all the fees for their citizens which is rare nevertheless. I strongly advocate that government should provide the funding for two reasons, firstly, it can guarantee all teenagers have the opportunities to go to college, and secondly, it can alleviate the financial burdens on our youngsters. To embark on, it can assume that even students from poverty families can pursue higher education as long as they meet the requirements. It is such a huge amount of money to pay for the study if children are from poor families and hence they may regard it as impossible for them to get into university even if they fulfil the entry criteria. With the support of the government, it can provide an opportunity to those who have potentials but without the funding and hence make contributions to the society afterwards. A typical case in point, the tuition fees for each semester can be more than 40000USD which is unaffordable for many. Apart from that, kids can concentrate on study given that they don't have to worry about the fees. Some students may work after school in order to pay for their daily expenses and tuition fees. Being back and forth between school and workplace, it is hard for them to achieve a good grade at school as they don't have enough time and energy to do revision. Therefore, if the government is willing to roll out the free tuition fees policy, it can undermine students' pressure and hence they can perform better at school. To conclude, I believe the pros for the government waiver of the fees overcome the cons, cited with the aforementioned reasons, fairness and better performance at school. Undeniably, there are some other ways for the government to use their revenue, for instead, on improving the infrastructure. Yet, talent is the future of a nation that relies on education so the expense of it is indispensable.
It is common that students pay for their
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own
tuition
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fees
in most of the countries,
still
,
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some
nations subsidize almost all the
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fees
for their citizens which is rare
nevertheless
. I
strongly
advocate that
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government
should provide the funding for two reasons,
firstly
, it can guarantee all
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teenagers
have the opportunities to go to college, and
secondly
, it can alleviate the financial burdens on our youngsters.

To embark on, it can assume that even students from poverty families can pursue higher education as long as they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the requirements. It is such a huge amount of money to pay for the study if children are from poor families and
hence
they may regard it as impossible for them to
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get
into university even if they fulfil the entry criteria. With the support of the
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government
, it can provide an opportunity to those who have potentials
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but
without the funding and
hence
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make
contributions to the society afterwards. A typical case in point, the tuition
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fees
for each semester can be more than 40000USD which is unaffordable for
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many
.

Apart from that, kids can concentrate on study
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given
that they don't
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have to
worry about the
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fees
.
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Some
students may work after
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school
in order to pay for their daily expenses and tuition
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fees
. Being back and forth between
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school
and workplace, it is
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hard
for them to achieve a
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good
grade at
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school
as they don't have
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enough
time and energy to do revision.
Therefore
, if the
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government
is willing to roll out the free tuition
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fees
policy, it can undermine students' pressure and
hence
they can perform better at school.

To conclude
, I believe the pros for the
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government
waiver of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fees
overcome the cons, cited with the aforementioned reasons, fairness and better performance at
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school
.
Undeniably
, there are
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some
other ways for the
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government
to
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use
their revenue, for
instead
, on improving the infrastructure.
Yet
, talent is the future of a nation that relies on education
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so
the expense of it is indispensable.
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IELTS essay In some countries students pay their college or university fee while in some other the government pay for them.

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