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In some countries people are now buying fewer new things and buying more second hand things instead In your opinion what are some possible reasons for this Is this a positive or negative trend v.1

In some countries people are now buying fewer new things and buying more second hand things instead In your opinion what are some possible reasons for this Is this a positive or negative trend v. 1
People are suffering from various health related issues caused due to stress. This essay will discuss the main causes of stress related illnesses, including increased work pressure and burden of achieving financial goals. This essay will also suggest the solutions to these problems, including proper work-life balance and financial planning. People are striving hard to sustain in the competition increased in the corporate domain. They are working under unfavourable conditions just to achieve their desired financial goals. For instance, some employees work in double shifts to earn more income to achieve the financial goal of children's education. In addition to this, some people work for long hours under tons of anxiety. This causes mental and physical strain and often result in depression or obesity. Solutions to these problems are working effectively while maintaining appropriate personal life balance. People need to realize that if they live only to be successful, they will suffer from life-altering events. They should spend some quality time with their loved ones to wipe out the tension. For example, if an employee adopts “smart working” strategy, it will reduce the time taken to complete the tasks and work will be done at ease. This minimization of working hours will help one to focus on his hobbies to reduce the strain caused by stress. On the other hand, Financial Planning will give assistance to achieve desired goals provided that the goals are realistic and specific. There are experts available to advise on financial planning. In conclusion, due to increased competition and pace of work, people are becoming ill as a result of stress. This essay discussed how the stress is caused due to long working hours and job pressure as well as the burden of achieving unattainable financial goals. This essay also focused on the suggestions that might reduce the anxiety and lead to a balanced life. “Smart working” strategies can avoid long working hours and financial planning to achieve goals are the main solutions to this growing issue.
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stress
. This
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will discuss the main causes of
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stress
related illnesses, including increased
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work
pressure and burden of achieving
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financial
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goals
. This
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financial
planning.

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conditions
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employees
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in double shifts to earn more income to
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the
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financial
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goal
of children's education.
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to this,
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people
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for long
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under tons of anxiety. This causes mental and physical strain and
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result in depression or obesity.

Solutions to these problems are
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effectively
while maintaining appropriate personal life balance.
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People
need to realize that if they
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only
to be successful, they will suffer from life-altering
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. They should spend
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quality time with their
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loved
ones to wipe out the tension.
For example
, if an employee adopts “smart
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working”
strategy, it will
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reduce
the time taken to complete the tasks and
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work
will
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will
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help
one to focus on his hobbies to
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reduce
the strain caused by
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.
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,
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Financial
Planning will give assistance to
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achieve
desired
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goals
provided that the
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goals
are realistic and specific. There are experts available to advise on
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planning.

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, due to increased competition and pace of
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,
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people
are becoming ill
as a result
of
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. This
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essay
discussed how the
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is caused
due to long
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working
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hours
and job pressure
as well
as the burden of achieving unattainable
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financial
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goals
. This
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essay
also
focused on the suggestions that might
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reduce
the anxiety and lead to a balanced life. “Smart
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strategies can avoid long
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working
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and
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planning to
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achieve
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are the main solutions to this growing issue.
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IELTS essay In some countries people are now buying fewer new things and buying more second hand things instead In your opinion what are some possible reasons for this Is this a positive or negative trend v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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