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some people say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

some people say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others. Y95m
In this present era, every person wants to be a prosperous man. Therefore, it has been considered by certain individuals that the most significant aspect about being affluent that they have the chance to assist others. This essay intends to elaborate why I partially agree with this statement in upcoming paragraphs. To embark with. There are numerous factors of work which will be done by prosperous people. Firstly, they can donate a number of money to charity domain to help poor people due to the fact there are a lot of people who are not able to acquire fundamental necessities of life such as education, medical, food, and so on. Richer people can provide education to poor children who can not afford school fees. For instance, there is a being human foundation which is founded by Salman khan donate approximately 70% million rupees to underprivileged people in India. Moreover, during the time of disaster, rich personalities can help to the dwellers which also motivate others to work hard. One the flip side, it also witnessed by people that by being richer, a person has not the opportunity to assist others because in this competitive era, they have to always consider their work. Affluent people mostly prefer to do their business rather than living free. Therefore, they do not have spare time help some one else. Moreover, it is government duty to provide basic facilities to poor section of country which will ameliorate their life style. government ought to provide financial aid to dweller which will make them able to acquire education and other rudimental requirement. To conclude, I reiterate my opinion that rich people can do charity work which will help poor people to ameliorate their life style, but it is responsibility of higher authority.
In this present era, every person wants to be a prosperous
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man
.
Therefore
, it has
been considered
by certain individuals that the most significant aspect about being affluent that they have the chance to assist others. This essay intends to elaborate why I
partially
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agree
with this statement in upcoming paragraphs. To embark with. There are numerous factors of
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work
which will
be done
by prosperous
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people
.
Firstly
, they can donate
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a number of money
to charity domain to
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help
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poor
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people
due to the fact there are
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a lot of
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people
who are not able to acquire fundamental necessities of life such as education, medical, food, and
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so
on. Richer
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people
can provide education to
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poor
children who can not afford school fees.
For instance
, there is a being human foundation which
is founded
by Salman khan donate approximately 70% million rupees to underprivileged
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people
in India.
Moreover
, during the time of disaster, rich personalities can
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help
to the dwellers which
also
motivate others to
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work
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hard
. One the flip side, it
also
witnessed by
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people
that by being richer, a person has not the opportunity to assist others
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because
in this competitive era, they
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have to
always consider their
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work
. Affluent
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people
mostly
prefer to do their business
rather
than living free.
Therefore
, they do not have spare time
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help
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some one
else.
Moreover
, it is
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government
duty to provide basic facilities to
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poor
section of country which will ameliorate their life style.
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government
ought to provide financial aid to dweller which will
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make
them able to acquire education and
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other
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rudimental
requirement.
To conclude
, I reiterate my opinion that rich
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people
can do charity
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work
which will
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help
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poor
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people
to ameliorate their life style,
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but
it is responsibility of higher authority.

IELTS essay some people say that the most important thing about being rich is that one has the opportunity to help others.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
295 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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