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Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practice and customs. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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According to some statistic’s data from the international organization, it’s reveal’s us the people’s invasion to borders for immigrating to another continent or country get higher than we expected particularly for students Although a few downsides to this approach can be seen, there are merits to which we should not turn a blind eye. On the plus side, the advantages for students who are flight to another land are countless; first up with gain experiences; students who are abandoned own home and initiating an innovative life’s style. They can achieve the full potential in stranger land than the motherland. In other words, fighting for your life could move your expectancy of your territories and relieve students of families backing, for instance, they toil away to make money or get a raise to afford the cost of living in a foreign country and relinquishes themselves for beg and it could acquire more talents and knacks also students have some fortune to make own education visa to the citizen and turn to the solid citizen. However, there are some drawback's needing to be taken into account; the most obvious argument is homesickness; scholar may have some eccentric and peculiar impression and manifest a feeling could be abnormal and unexpected, a good illustration is since they reach to a dead end, they make a wrong call and leads to suicide or maybe some of them switch over to homeless and make the city face offensive although this is contrary to their opinion. On the other hand, most of the learners have not supervisor to give them a clue of how to live and make friends with other people in society. To conclude, Student migration to another country can be both rewarding and problematic. While given the situation, they contemplate these benefits and consequences in this sophisticated decision but they ought to be conscious and do not look for any jeopardy.
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statistic’s data from the international organization, it’s reveal’s us the
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people
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get
higher than we
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expected
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Although a few downsides to this approach can be
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seen
, there are merits to which we should not turn a blind eye.

On the plus side, the advantages for
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students
who are flight to another land are countless;
first
up with gain experiences;
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students
who
are abandoned
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own
home and initiating an innovative life’s style. They can achieve the full potential in stranger land than the motherland.
In other words
, fighting for your life could
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move
your expectancy of your territories and relieve
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students
of families backing,
for instance
, they toil away to
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make
money or
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get
a raise to afford the cost of living in a foreign country and relinquishes themselves for beg and it could acquire more talents and knacks
also
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students
have
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some
fortune to
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make
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own
education visa to the citizen and turn to the solid citizen.

However
, there are
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some
drawback's needing to
be taken
into account; the most obvious argument is homesickness; scholar may have
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some
eccentric and peculiar impression and manifest a feeling could be abnormal and unexpected, a
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illustration is since they reach to a dead
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end
, they
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make
a
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wrong
call and leads to suicide or maybe
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some
of them switch over to homeless and
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make
the city face offensive although this is contrary to their opinion.
On the other hand
, most of the learners have not supervisor to give them a clue of how to
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live
and
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make
friends with other
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people
in society.

To conclude
,
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Student
migration to another country can be both rewarding and problematic. While
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given
the situation, they contemplate these benefits and consequences in this sophisticated decision
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but
they ought to be conscious and do not look for any jeopardy.
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IELTS essay Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practice and customs.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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