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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home? v.6

In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home? v. 6
An accommodation is one of the essential factors for the people living. We need a place to cover, protect and accommodate from the severe weather, the pollution and other dangerous. The property rental is primarily preferred by the populations in many countries. There are several benefits and drawbacks from renting a house. In terms of advantages, the property rental provides affordability for the people who just begin their life from the teenager to adult. It is cheaper to rent a place as the additional fees such as the maintenance fees and the utilities bills are responsible by a landlord. Additionally, an ability to choose the convenient location is given by the renting. For example, the people who use the public transport as a main transport mode would be able to choose an affordable accommodation, where is close to the train station. Overall, the property rental provides various benefits. In contrast, renting a house might not be economical when we consider in a long-term commitment. Many property markets suggest that the average monthly rental is equivalent to the cost of house instalment for each month. While we are paying the same price, the instalment means we own the house and we are able to get profits from reselling or lease to other tenants in the future. Another drawback is that the property rental is not flexible in various aspects, for example, we are locked by the decoration of the house, the furniture, and other relevant issues. These disadvantages need to be considered when we are deciding to rent a house. In conclusion, property rental provides both benefits and drawbacks. It might be suitable for some circumstances while others might not.
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "accommodation".
An accommodation
is one of the essential factors for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
living. We need a place to cover, protect and accommodate from the severe weather, the pollution and
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other
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dangerous
. The
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property
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rental
is
primarily
preferred by the populations in
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many
countries. There are several benefits and drawbacks from renting a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

In terms of advantages, the
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property
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rental
provides affordability for the
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people
who
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just
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begin
their life from the
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teenager
to adult. It is cheaper to rent a place as the additional fees such as the maintenance fees and the utilities bills are responsible by a landlord.
Additionally
, an ability to choose the convenient location is
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given
by the renting.
For example
, the
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people
who
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use
the public transport as a main transport mode would be able to choose an affordable accommodation, where is close to the train station.
Overall
, the
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property
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rental
provides various benefits.

In contrast
, renting a
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house
might not be economical when we consider in a long-term commitment.
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Many
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property
markets suggest that the average monthly
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rental
is equivalent to the cost of
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house
Possible spelling mistake. 'instalment' is British English.
instalment
for each month. While we are paying the same price, the
Possible spelling mistake. 'instalment' is British English.
instalment
means we
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own
the
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house and
we are able to
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get
profits from reselling or lease to
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other
tenants in the future. Another drawback is that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
property
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
rental
is not flexible in various aspects,
for example
, we
are locked
by the decoration of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
, the furniture, and
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other
relevant issues. These disadvantages need to
be considered
when we are deciding to rent a
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house
.

In conclusion
,
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property
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rental
provides both benefits and drawbacks. It might be suitable for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
circumstances while others might not.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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