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In some countries most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages. v.5

In some countries most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages. v. 5
Most people of developing countries prefer a rented accommodation instead of buying a new home of their own. Renting a house has benefits of flexibility and is an affordable option for middle class people, but there are also some drawbacks to be taken into account. Firstly, people who live in a rented house always have an option to move to a new city or house. In other words, many people in metro cities have transferable jobs so renting a house seems the best possible option to them because it is not possible for many to buy a new house in every city. Secondly, every person cannot afford to buy a house of their choice as it requires to pay a huge amount to the builder so renting a house or apartment seems easy option. To state an example, even a poor person can have one room to rent and pay on the monthly basis. On the other hand, living in a rented house does not give that liberty or sense of freedom. Many landlords put certain conditions for tenants and those limitations sometimes raise a feeling of dissatisfaction among family members. For instance, in major cities, tenants are not allowed to make any hole in the walls and some owners even impose a condition of no noise after midnight. Another possible issue is increasing rent rates in most big cities. In these cities, rent has increased so much that almost half of an employee's income is spent in paying rent. In conclusion, while having a rented home certainly has some benefits, it can also lead to dissatisfaction among people or huge burden on the pocket of a poor person.
Most
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people
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developing countries
prefer a rented accommodation
instead
of buying a new home of their
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own
. Renting a
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house
has benefits of flexibility and is an affordable
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option
for middle
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class
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people
,
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but
there are
also
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some
drawbacks to
be taken
into account.

Firstly
,
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people
who
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live
in a rented
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house
always have an
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option
to
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move
to a new city or
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house
.
In other words
,
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many
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people
in metro
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cities
have transferable jobs
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so
renting a
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house
seems the best possible
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option
to them
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because
it is not possible for
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many
to
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buy
a new
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house
in every city.
Secondly
, every person cannot afford to
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buy
a
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house
of their choice as it requires to pay a huge amount to the builder
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so
renting a
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house
or apartment seems easy
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option
. To state an example, even a poor person can have one room to rent and pay on the monthly basis.

On the other hand
, living in a rented
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house
does not give that liberty or sense of freedom.
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Many
landlords put certain conditions for tenants and those limitations
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sometimes
raise a feeling of dissatisfaction among family members.
For instance
, in major
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cities
, tenants are not
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allowed
to
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make
any hole in the walls and
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some
owners even impose a condition of no noise after midnight. Another possible issue is increasing rent rates in most
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big
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cities
. In these
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cities
, rent has increased
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so
much that almost half of an employee's income
is spent
in paying rent.

In conclusion
, while having a rented home
certainly
has
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some
benefits, it can
also
lead to dissatisfaction among
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people
or huge burden on the pocket of a poor person.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries most people prefer to rent a house rather than buying one. Describe the advantages and disadvantages. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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