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In some countries more and more adults are living with their parents after completion of college and finding job do the advantages over weight the disadvantages

In some countries more and more adults are living with their parents after completion of college and finding job do the advantages over weight the disadvantages GLpjQ
The has been Sean the Many youngsters staying with the family after completion of education and finding work. I believe advantages or more then disadvantages. First and foremost advantages of the Adults who stars ending money it will help to their family in financial as the support. For example the person who ends money in his team he only can clear a student loan without blaming others and depending on others. Similarly Many more the elders who are living in their house help them also for hospitals and any medical issues they will be helping hand Secondly it will not be any problem to the family to grow financially in the society shop shows the response to the family The disadvantages of living together with the fat parents after graduating instance not feel comfortable in their family because they start any day wants to global the world it’s become very difficult to the youngsters to be in a comfortable zone and to take the responsibility of the family I conclude I like to repeat that advantages more because the family gets financial support where has disadvantages of the youngsters cannot be free.
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youngsters staying with the
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after completion of education and finding work. I believe advantages or more
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disadvantages.

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and foremost advantages of the Adults who stars ending money it will
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help
to their
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family
in financial as the support.
For example
the person who ends money in his team he
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only
can
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clear
a student loan without blaming others and depending on others.
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Similarly
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Many
more the elders who are living in their
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house
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help
them
also
for hospitals and any medical issues they will be helping hand

Secondly
it will not be any problem to the
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family
to grow
financially
in the society shop
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shows
the response to the family

The disadvantages of living together with the
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fat
parents after graduating instance not feel comfortable in their
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family
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because
they
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start
any day wants to global the world it’s become
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very
difficult to the youngsters to be in a comfortable zone and to take the responsibility of the
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family


I conclude I like to repeat that advantages more
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because
the
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family
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gets
financial support where has disadvantages of the youngsters cannot be free.
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IELTS essay In some countries more and more adults are living with their parents after completion of college and finding job do the advantages over weight the disadvantages

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3 paragraphs
192 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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