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In some countries increasing number of people are suffering from from health problems result of eating too much fast foods government should impose higher taxes on them on what extent do you agree or disagree with this v.1

In some countries increasing number of people are suffering from from health problems result of eating too much fast foods government should impose higher taxes on them on what extent with this v. 1
It is a true fact that excess eating of Fast Food leads to various health issues by which people who are suffering from a height increasing day by day so the government must impose higher taxes on them. I defer to this to a large extent for some reason my position is argued further with explanations. Out of all the reasons the form of one is that there are no essential and beneficial vitamins are there in junk food as a result of these needs of our body didn't get fulfilled by which efficiency of a body was getting decreased day by day so from that perspective government should charge Hai taxes on them. Additionally the junk food take and a significant amount of time to digest rather than other green leafy vegetables, which somehow affect individual metabolism through various ways Especially for the kids who love to eat these kinds of food but don't know the application of this. However, I would not overlook the other side too, begin with as foods like these don't take enough time to prepare so that would be a good breakfast or lunch for the persons who are in a hurry for their home for the work. Apart from this, I want to say not on a daily basis does to conclude the discussion, it can be finally said that consumption of Fast Food occasionally in a month is ok but not for the daily basis.
It is a true fact that excess eating of
Fast
Food
leads to various health issues by which
people
who are suffering from a height increasing day by day
so
the
government
must
impose higher taxes on them. I defer to this to a large extent for
some
reason my position
is argued
further
with explanations.

Out of all the reasons the form of one is that there are no essential and beneficial vitamins are there in junk
food
as a result
of these needs of our body didn't
get
fulfilled by which efficiency of a body was getting decreased day by day
so
from that perspective
government
should charge
Hai
taxes on them.

Additionally
the junk
food
take and a significant amount of time to digest
rather
than other green leafy vegetables, which somehow affect individual metabolism through various ways
Especially
for the kids who
love
to eat these kinds of
food
but
don't know the application of this.

However
, I would not overlook the other side too,
begin
with as
foods
like these don't take
enough
time to prepare
so
that would be a
good
breakfast or lunch for the persons who are in a hurry for their home for the work. Apart from this, I want to say not on a daily basis does
to conclude
the discussion, it can be
finally
said that consumption of
Fast
Food
occasionally
in a month is ok
but
not for the daily basis.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay In some countries increasing number of people are suffering from from health problems result of eating too much fast foods government should impose higher taxes on them on what extent with this v. 1

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