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Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resource, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries, and not using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion? Support your point of view with relevant examples. v.5

Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resource, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries, and not using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion? Support your point of view with relevant examples. v. 5
It goes without saying that, deteriorating environmental conditions are one of the most important issues facing us over the past century. A state of folks believes that reduction in usage of fossil fuels and utilizing the renewable energy resources can help to address this problem. I agree with the given statement as such a trend can help to minimize the difficulties associated with climate. Firstly, if people increase in demand for renewable energy resources, the extinction of non-renewable energy will not arise. In addition, alternative power resources are cheap and available in the nature because they almost originate from natural power such as wind and sun. Thus, people can have more natural light in order to save electricity. In this day and age, in fact, many countries are already using solar-powered and wind-powered. Moreover, vehicles also already too, even in technology. Also, it cannot be denied that the solar industry is booming in many nations. On the other hand, prevalent of using coal and oil leads to pollution, especially, air pollution, which has a devastating impact on human beings. It makes people more prone to diseases such as asthma and skin allergies. When people use natural resources, they can enjoy the fresh air more which make people relax and comfortably. By communicating with renewable power resources, people will raise their endurance, in particular, people can have a good heart which is very necessary in order to avoid of many diseases. In other words, renewable energy resources are not only effective, but also helpful for economizing non-renewable power resources. In my opinion, climate change is a big environmental issues, but this problem can be resolved by stopping fossil fuels on fire and using renewable energy resources, for instance, wind sun and other energy in the nature.
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issues facing us over the past century. A state of folks believes that reduction in usage of fossil fuels and utilizing the
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renewable
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help
to minimize the difficulties associated with climate.

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, if
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people
increase in demand for
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renewable
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energy
resources, the extinction of non-renewable
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energy
will not arise.
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, alternative
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resources are
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cheap
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because
they almost originate from natural
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power
such as wind and sun.
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people
can have more natural light in order to save electricity. In this day and age, in fact,
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many
countries are already using solar-powered and wind-powered.
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nations.

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people
more prone to diseases such as asthma and skin allergies. When
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people
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use
natural resources, they can enjoy the fresh air more which
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people
relax and
comfortably
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renewable
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power
resources,
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people
will raise their endurance,
in particular
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people
can have a
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heart which is
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necessary in order to avoid of
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many
diseases.
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renewable
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energy
resources are not
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only
effective,
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also
helpful for economizing non-renewable
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power
resources.

In my opinion, climate
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change
is a
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big
environmental issues,
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but
this problem can
be resolved
by stopping fossil fuels on fire and using
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renewable
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energy
resources,
for instance
, wind sun and other
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energy
in the nature.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay Climate change is a big environmental problem that has become critical in last couple of decades. Some people claim that humans should stop burning fossil fuels and use only alternative energy resource, such as wind and solar power. Others say that oil, gas and coal are essential for many industries, and not using them will lead to economic collapse. What is your opinion? Support your point of view with relevant examples. v. 5

Essay
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4 paragraphs
295 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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