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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think it is good for the country, while some people believe that government should control salaries and limit people can earn. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. v.11

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think it is good for the country, while some people believe that government should control salaries and limit people can earn. v. 11
Although there are few people belonging to the top echelons of a company, who are compensated excessively, some people believe that the government should play a proactive role in capping their compensation. I firmly believe that the government should not engage in such measures, as it is detrimental to the society. On the one hand, top executives of a company make excessive compensations, based on their talents and abilities which justifies such renumerations. This is good for the country as they help in growing the company which in turn will help the economy. Their ideas and strategies will help in building more workforce and also their spending will also help the economy. As per the global statistics, these are the people whose funding helps in charity work as well as researches which helps in developing new technologies or cure for deadly diseases. In my obdurate opinion, curbing their income and reducing their numbers will affect the economy, the government should stay clear from these people. On the other hand, some people believe that the government should adapt a communist approach by limiting their renumeration. This approach will reduce the economic disparity between the groups of people and that the funds could be used to develop more workforce or even for social causes. Capping their figures and redistributing their wealth will especially help the middle class and will lift families out living below the poverty line. The unemployment can also be reduced with these sorts of measures and the economy could be revived holistically. To conclude, the compensation of high earners should not be capped by the government which in my opinion is good for the economy.
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people
belonging to the top echelons of a
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company
, who
are compensated
excessively
,
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some
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people
believe that the
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government
should play a proactive role in capping their compensation. I
firmly
believe that the
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government
should not engage in such measures, as it is detrimental to the society.

On the one hand, top executives of a
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company
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make
excessive compensations, based on their talents and abilities which justifies such
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renumerations
. This is
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good
for the country as they
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help
in growing the
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company
which in turn will
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help
the
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economy
. Their
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ideas
and strategies will
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help
in building more workforce and
also
their spending will
also
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help
the
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economy
. As per the global statistics, these are the
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people
whose funding
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helps
in charity work
as well
as researches which
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helps
in developing new technologies or cure for deadly diseases. In my obdurate opinion, curbing their income and reducing their numbers will affect the
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economy
, the
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government
should stay
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clear
from these
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people
.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
believe that the
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government
should adapt a communist approach by limiting their
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renumeration
. This approach will
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reduce
the economic disparity between the groups of
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people
and that the funds could be
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used
to develop more workforce or even for social causes. Capping their figures and redistributing their wealth will
especially
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help
the middle
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class
and will lift families out living below the poverty line. The unemployment can
also
be
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reduced
with these sorts of measures and the
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economy
could
be revived
holistically
.

To conclude
, the compensation of high earners should not
be capped
by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
which in my opinion is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for the
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economy
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think it is good for the country, while some people believe that government should control salaries and limit people can earn. v. 11

Essay
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276 words
6.5
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