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In some areas of the US, a Curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be outdoors. After a particular time at night, unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this v.1

In some areas of the US, a Curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be outdoors. After a particular time at night, unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this v. 1
The US has demarcated some of its areas, and implemented a curfew, which does not entertain teenagers outdoors after a specific time post-sunset unless they are in the company of an adult. In my opinion, I agree that youngsters should be accompanied by an elderly person when go out late evenings considering their safety in mind, especially for young girls and children. To begin with, though the safety and security of women have been taken into consideration as a high priority and necessary measures have been incorporated, the rate of assault, abduction, and rape of young girls in recent times has not reduced. For instance, on May 9th, 2019, a young girl who was returning home at 8 in the evening from a nearby store, was abducted and raped by a truck driver. Her condition was pronounced critical when reports were filed and she was found by the police at the assault's residence 2 days after the gruesome incident. It is such incidences that create fear in the minds of the elders, resulting in avoiding young girls from going out alone at night without their company. Furthermore, it is not only the young girls who are being shadowed at night, college-going boys who travel between stations after late-night jobs are also subjected to crime as well. For example, robbery and murder have increased in the lanes along the transit station. It is observed that most of the mobbed and injured are boys less than 18yrs of age. Due to such scenarios, school and college-going boys and girls are directed to not take shifts at night and if necessary, they stay in the company of a person elder to them until they get to a safe place. In conclusion, nowadays parts of the US are not safe enough for teenagers to roam around late night due to the increasing crime observed and it is for this reason, it is recommended that adults accompany the young ones when they have to go out at night during unavoidable circumstances.
The US has demarcated
some
of its areas, and implemented a curfew, which does not entertain
teenagers
outdoors after a specific time post-sunset unless they are in the
company
of an adult. In my opinion, I
agree
that youngsters should
be accompanied
by an elderly person when go out late evenings considering their safety in mind,
especially
for
young
girls
and children.

To
begin
with, though the safety and security of women have
been taken
into consideration as a high priority and necessary measures have
been incorporated
, the rate of assault, abduction, and rape of
young
girls
in recent times has not
reduced
.
For instance
, on May 9th, 2019, a
young
girl
who was returning home at 8 in the evening from a nearby store,
was abducted
and raped by a truck driver. Her condition
was pronounced
critical when reports were
filed and
she
was found
by the police at the assault's residence 2 days after the gruesome incident. It is such incidences that create fear in the minds of the elders, resulting in avoiding
young
girls
from going out alone at
night
without their
company
.

Furthermore
, it is not
only
the
young
girls
who are
being shadowed
at
night
, college-going boys who travel between stations after late-night jobs are
also
subjected to crime
as well
.
For example
, robbery and murder have increased in the lanes along the transit station. It
is observed
that most of the mobbed and injured are boys less than 18yrs of age. Due to such scenarios, school and college-going boys and
girls
are directed
to not take shifts at
night
and if necessary, they stay in the
company
of a person elder to them until they
get
to a safe place.

In conclusion
, nowadays parts of the US are not safe
enough
for
teenagers
to roam around late
night
due to the increasing crime observed and it is
for this reason
, it
is recommended
that adults accompany the
young
ones when they
have to
go out at
night
during unavoidable circumstances.
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IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a Curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be outdoors. After a particular time at night, unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this v. 1

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