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In several countries around the world students take a year off between high school and university in order to travel, work or volunteer. However, in most countries students go straight to university after graduating. Discuss both approaches and give your opinion about which is better.

In several countries around the world students take a year off between high school and university in order to travel, work or volunteer. However, in most countries students go straight to university after graduating. 3jy5
After graduation of high schools, students have multiple ideas to seek out themselves, such as travelling, volunteer, or straight to the academy. Each selection will be an essential choice to develop their life. The argument that students should devote their time for a priceless experience or straight to go academy is a debatable topic. In this essay, both sides of perspectives will be erabolated with reasonable reasons, and it will be concluded with my opinion. Firstly, getting experiences from other resources can be useful for students. For instance, the social understanding is beneficial when they interact with business people. For example, when they try to recruit for companies, the social skills and some volunteering practice can be their sales points to join in the companies. Companies always looking for a person who can join in a team as work-ready-graduate. Thus, the prospect of getting the knowledges from the outer resource can be considerable. This is why it can be argued that students ought to take a year off to get some experiences. Nevertheless, going to the educational institution after a graduation would be a beneficial over the opposite idea. Students have opportunities to experience aforementioned things during being at the institute. For instance, after some examinations, they usually have vacation seasons, which is normally more than 2 weeks or more. Hence, even if they cannot afford to get a year off, they can attend to a volunteer work, going to other countries, or join in the company as internships. Therefore, this is made clear that straight to university is totally rewarding than the other. To summarize, the two sides of the argument concerning the better approaches as the graduated high school students. However, after thoroughly analyses of both views, it is clear that straight to institute is a more beneficial than the opposite idea, because all of the experiences can obtain during the educational institution life. Students don't have to take a year off to get those experiences forcibly.
After graduation of high schools,
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students
have multiple
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ideas
to seek out themselves, such as travelling, volunteer, or
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straight
to the academy. Each selection will be an essential choice to develop their life. The argument that
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students
should devote their time for a priceless
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experience
or
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straight
to go academy is a debatable topic. In this essay, both sides of perspectives will be
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erabolated
with reasonable reasons, and it will
be concluded
with my opinion.

Firstly
, getting
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experiences
from other resources can be useful for
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students
.
For instance
, the social understanding is beneficial when they interact with business
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people
.
For example
, when they try to recruit for
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companies
, the social
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skills
and
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some
volunteering practice can be their sales points to
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join
in the
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companies
.
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Companies
always looking for a person who can
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join
in a team as work-ready-graduate.
Thus
, the prospect of getting the
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knowledges
from the outer resource can be considerable. This is why it can
be argued
that
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students
ought to take a year off to
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get
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some
experiences.

Nevertheless
, going to the educational institution after a graduation would be a beneficial over the opposite
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idea
.
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Students
have opportunities to
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experience
aforementioned things during being at the institute.
For instance
, after
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some
examinations, they
usually
have vacation seasons, which is
normally
more than 2 weeks or more.
Hence
, even if they cannot afford to
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get
a year off, they can attend to a volunteer work, going to other countries, or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
in the
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company
as internships.
Therefore
, this
is made
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clear
that
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straight
to university is
totally
Use "(rewarding)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
rewarding
than the other.

To summarize
, the two sides of the argument concerning the better approaches as the graduated high school
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students
.
However
, after
thoroughly
analyses of both views, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that
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straight
to institute is a more beneficial than the opposite
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idea
,
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because
Consider using "all the".
all of the
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experiences
can obtain during the educational institution life.
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Students
don't
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have to
take a year off to
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get
those
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experiences
forcibly
.
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IELTS essay In several countries around the world students take a year off between high school and university in order to travel, work or volunteer. However, in most countries students go straight to university after graduating.

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