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In recent years, people watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this? Should the government give financial support to local cinema to produce local films? v.3

In recent years, people watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this? Should the government give financial support to local cinema to produce local films? v. 3
It is undoubtedly the growing demand to watch more movies from foreign countries over against the film that has been made in local countries. There are several reasons for this preference and various measures can be taken by the government to improve the tendency of people to watch local films. It can be seen that the principal reason for this situation is the advent of the Internet and globalization of culture. In past, Children growing up, only had access to traditional movies that have been made in their home country. But in the Internet era, they not only access to traditional and local movies, but they also can watch worldwide films. Owing to the intense special effects of the international movies, people mostly prefer Hollywood blockbusters versus a domestic cinema. The reason that international cinema is more popular and seems dominant to local one is financial. The budget that allocated Hollywood and Bollywood compare with home country produced films have an extreme monetary resources, such as great studios and high technology equipment to make films that is beyond our imagination and sales billion dollars in box office. I personally believe that government ought to take action to persuade their residents to watch local films. With regard to international movie preference, government can play its part by supporting local film producers and offer some facilities to them, in order to preserve domestic films and encourage citizens to watch their films. Moreover, promoting more video on demanded websites would be an appropriate improvisation for developing national movies. Besides, these activities, mot only preserve local culture, but would also give chances to local producers to grow and become more experienced and talented. In conclusion, it is unquestionable that there is a comprehensive tent to watch foreign movies. Since Hollywood have enriched film studios and billions of dollars allocated to its film industry. However, the national government could address this significant expansion of international movies, if they subsidized the local films.
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countries
over against the film that has
been made
in
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local
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countries
. There are several reasons for this preference and various measures can
be taken
by the
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government
to
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improve
the tendency of
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people
to
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watch
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local
films.

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that the principal reason for this situation is the advent of the Internet and globalization of culture.
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In past
, Children growing up,
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only
had access to traditional
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movies
that have
been made
in their home
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country
.
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But
in the Internet era, they not
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only
access to traditional and
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local
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movies
,
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they
also
can
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worldwide films. Owing to the intense special effects of the
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international
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movies
,
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people
mostly
prefer Hollywood blockbusters versus a domestic cinema.

The reason that
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international
cinema is more popular and seems dominant to
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local
one is financial. The budget that allocated Hollywood and Bollywood compare with home
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country
produced films have an extreme monetary
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resources
, such as great studios and high technology equipment to
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make
films
that is
beyond our imagination and sales billion dollars in box office.

I
personally
believe that
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government
ought to take action to persuade their residents to
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watch
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local
films. With regard to
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international
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movie
preference,
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government
can play its part by supporting
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local
film producers and offer
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some
facilities to them, in order to preserve domestic films and encourage citizens to
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watch
their films.
Moreover
, promoting more video on demanded websites would be an appropriate improvisation for developing national
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movies
.
Besides
, these activities, mot
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only
preserve
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local
culture,
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but
would
also
give chances to
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local
producers to grow and become more experienced and talented.

In conclusion
, it is unquestionable that there is a comprehensive tent to
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watch
foreign
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
. Since Hollywood have enriched film studios and billions of dollars allocated to its film industry.
However
, the national
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
could address this significant expansion of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
international
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
, if they subsidized the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
local
films.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay In recent years, people watch more movies from overseas? What are the reasons for this? Should the government give financial support to local cinema to produce local films? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
327 words
6.5
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