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In recent years more and more people use internet for information and buy product. Do you think the positive approach of this trend outweigh the negative.

In recent years more and more people use internet for information and buy product. Do you think the positive approach of this trend outweigh the negative. bbBng
One of the most conspicuous trend of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the issue regarding utilitization of internet. In the present era majority of the folks use world wide web for obtaining knowledge along with purchasing goods. As such there are both merits and demerits of this phenomenon such as fraud, misrepresentation. However, I am of the opinion that its positive aspects overpowering the negative ones, which will be explored in subsequent paragraphs. There are myriad of advantages of this trend. One evident benefit of internet is latest information. Broadly speaking from the number of platforms, which are available on internet, we can get useful data. There are variety of E-books with very low cost sometimes free of cost. Consequently, almost every person can avil the knowledge about anything and latei information it is much easier to update data in online rather than physical books. Of the similar influence it is affordable. To specify, if someone wants to purchase online product, there are plethora of websites that provide online purchasing with home delivery at cheap rates as compared to stores. For instance, I have recently buy a suit from amazon at one third price of local rate. As a result, people can purchase more and branded products at their budget. Another pivotal aspect of aforementioned proposition is time saving. To elaborate, masses nowadays have hectic schedule due to which, they do not get the time to go to shopping malls than buy rather they prefer to purchase online as it saves time for transportation by just sitting at home. Therefore, the E-shopping is popular in present period. It would be reiterated that, although online platform sometimes presents false data, but also its another positive side like affordability, up to date knowledge cannot be denied. Thus, I believe that this situation is positive one as it is essential for modern world.
One of the most conspicuous trend of
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today
's world is a colossal upsurge in the issue regarding
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utilitization
of internet. In the present era majority of the folks
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use
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world wide web
for obtaining knowledge along with purchasing
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goods
. As such there are both merits and demerits of this phenomenon such as fraud, misrepresentation.
However
, I am of the opinion that its
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positive
aspects overpowering the
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negative
ones, which will
be explored
in subsequent paragraphs.

There are myriad of advantages of this trend. One evident benefit of internet is
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latest
information.
Broadly
speaking from the number of platforms, which are available on internet, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
useful data. There are variety of E-books with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
low cost
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sometimes
free of cost.
Consequently
, almost every person can
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avil
the knowledge about anything and
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latei
information it is much easier to update data in
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online
rather
than physical books.

Of the similar influence it is affordable. To specify, if someone wants to
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purchase
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
product, there are plethora of websites that provide
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
purchasing with home delivery at
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
rates as compared to stores.
For instance
, I have recently
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buy
a suit from
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amazon
at one third price of local rate.
As a result
,
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people
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
more and branded products at their budget.

Another pivotal aspect of aforementioned proposition is time saving. To elaborate, masses nowadays have hectic schedule due to which, they do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
the time to go to shopping malls than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
rather
they prefer to
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purchase
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
as it saves time for transportation by
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just
sitting at home.
Therefore
, the E-shopping is popular in present period.

It would
be reiterated
that, although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
platform
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sometimes
presents false data,
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but
also
its another
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positive
side like affordability, up to date knowledge cannot
be denied
.
Thus
, I believe that this situation is
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positive
one as it is essential for modern world.
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IELTS essay In recent years more and more people use internet for information and buy product. Do you think the positive approach of this trend outweigh the negative.

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312 words
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