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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development? v.15

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development? v. 15
Initially, purchasing methods have been changed in large scale that small grocery shops are closing. This essay will discuss that buying in large shopping malls has created a positive advancement because not only it has provided someone to purchase things at common point but also has increased the standards of local people. Firstly, positive progress of buying in large grocery stores is that people become able to buy each and everything at a single point. Everything is available in these types of shopping malls which is not provided by smaller centres. For example, at shopping centres somebody can easily buy from a small nail to big home appliances. Hence; therefore, buying things at big point is off the positive advancements that is highly countable. Secondly, another positive impact could be the standard of local people, that is, increased by visiting these types of shopping centres no matter how much they buy per visit. People who visit these types of centres come to know about many unknown things which they even do not know but are highly useful. Having visited these centres, they purchase those small but necessary things like home appliances, clothes, and grocery items that bring their life standards up. Hence; therefore, this is also one of the major factors which leads to positive development. Finally, buying in large shopping malls has created a good impact over many people that they have become able to purchase necessary goods at one place without visiting the number of stores and also has raised the standards of common people that they have explored new areas of life which were hidden for a long time.
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, purchasing methods have been
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small
grocery shops are closing. This essay will discuss that
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buying
in
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large
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shopping
malls has created a
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positive
advancement
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because
not
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only
it has provided someone to
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purchase
things at common point
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but
also
has increased the
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standards
of local
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people
.

Firstly
,
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positive
progress of
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in
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large
grocery stores is that
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people
become able to
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buy
each and everything at a single point. Everything is available in these types of
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shopping
malls which is not provided by smaller
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centres
.
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, at
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shopping
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centres
somebody can
easily
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nail to
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big
home appliances.
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therefore
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things at
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point is off the
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advancements
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highly
countable.

Secondly
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positive
impact could be the
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standard
of local
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people
,
that is
, increased by visiting these types of
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shopping
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centres
no matter how much they
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per visit.
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People
who visit these types of
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centres
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come
to know about
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unknown things which they even do not know
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are
highly
useful. Having visited these
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centres
, they
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those
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small
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necessary things like home appliances, clothes, and grocery items that bring their life
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standards
up.
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;
therefore
, this is
also
one of the major factors which leads to
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positive
development.

Finally
,
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buying
in
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large
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shopping
malls has created a
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good
impact over
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many
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people
that they have become able to
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purchase
necessary
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goods
at one place without visiting the number of stores and
also
has raised the
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standards
of common
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people
that they have explored new areas of life which
were hidden
for a long time.
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IELTS essay In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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