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Essay. In today’s modernized area, where the air pollution is rapidly on the verge to worse, one of the main issues is that many mankind consider that natural issues should be decided on a worldwide scale while others trust it is better to rise massive with them nationally. One of the main problem is that some habits think clean the air consequently people are breathing pure air. There is no doubt, industries are developing on the contrary firms realize smokes. In the result of this motion dust cause to illness. In this essay there will be discussed air pollution. First of all, there are many natural problems in the world. One of them is air pollution. Many companies are effect to the nature. Because this firms are realized smoke. Smokes are prestige to people’s health. Among the most important reason by people are lead to illness. In the second place, the government should be impose taxes for people who throw wastes to the land. Therefore government workers are help to nature. Owing to plastic thing are not decay. And this motion is effect to fertile yards. If we follow this motion our planet is not getting pollution and pollution. In the result another climates ought to make taxes too because people are afraid from taxes. To sum up they are keep the nature. Finally, we must keep our nature from natural phenomena. Lights and thunderstorms are damage for people and their houses. So people must built smaller their houses. Also storms cannot effect to nature. In my opinion according to the history there were not natural problems. On the other hand historical people are keep the pure air. Owing to they are helthier han today. In the result of this motion these days many countries are developed and built many firms. If we do not care for environment the life must be over. Summarize the point humans must begin to protect the nature like animals. Owing to the nature is our great wealth the life must be over. The most important cause the government should be impose the taxes for people who throw wastes to clean earth.
Essay.

In
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today
’s modernized area, where the
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air
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pollution
is
rapidly
on the verge to worse, one of the main issues is that
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many mankind
consider that
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natural
issues should
be decided
on a worldwide scale while others trust it is better to rise massive with them
nationally
. One of the main problem is that
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some
habits
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think
clean the
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air
consequently
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people
are breathing pure
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air
. There is no doubt, industries are developing
on the contrary
firms realize smokes. In the result of this
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motion
dust cause to illness. In this essay there will
be discussed
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air
pollution.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, there are
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many
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natural
problems in the world. One of them is
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air
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pollution
.
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Many
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companies
are effect to the
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nature
.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
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this
firms
are realized
smoke. Smokes are prestige to
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people’s
health. Among the most
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important
reason by
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people
are lead to illness.

In the second place, the
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government
should be
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impose
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taxes
for
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people
who throw wastes to the land.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Therefore
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government
workers are
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help
to
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nature
. Owing to plastic thing are not decay. And this
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motion
is effect to fertile yards. If we follow this
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motion
our planet is not getting
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pollution
and
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pollution
. In the result another climates ought to
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make
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taxes
too
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because
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people
are
The usual collocation for "afraid" is "of" not "from". Did you mean "afraid of"?
afraid from
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taxes
. To sum up they are
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keep
the nature.

Finally
, we
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must
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keep
our
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nature
from
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natural
phenomena. Lights and thunderstorms are damage for
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people
and their
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houses
.
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So
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people
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must
built smaller their
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houses
.
Also
storms cannot effect to nature.

In my opinion according to the history there were not
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natural
problems.
On the other hand
historical
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people
are
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keep
the pure
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air
. Owing to they are
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helthier
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han
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today
. In the result of this
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motion
these days
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many
countries
are developed
and built
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many
firms. If we do not care for environment the life
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must
be over.

Summarize the point humans
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must
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begin
to protect the
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nature
like animals. Owing to the
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nature
is our great wealth the life
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must
be over. The most
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important
cause the
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government
should be
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impose
the
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taxes
for
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people
who throw wastes to clean earth.
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IELTS essay in my disscussion essay.

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
357 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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