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In much of the world, there is very little wildlife left. To what extent is this problem in your country? What, if anything, can be done to reverse this trend?

In much of the world, there is very little wildlife left. What, if anything, can be done to reverse this trend? NVXl2
There are almost no animals left at all in my country, and species such as tigers, bears and reindeer went extinct several decades ago. While this is obviously due to (1) the twin processes of industrialization and urbanization, there is still (2) time to preserve what is left of our precious wildlife. Following (3) the horrific civil war during (4) 0 1950s, our natural environment was further devastated by (5) an onslaught of (6) rapid industrialization, which is still continuing today. This, combined with massive construction projects that have covered almost 20% of our total land area, has left very little room for any wild species to survive. But survived they have, although in increasingly small numbers. While there is (7) a surprisingly large population of deer in our numerous mountain ranges, otters and other small animals still live on (8) banks of our many rivers. (9)The question is, how can we ensure their survival after so many species have already perished? While (10) an obvious answer is (11) o more active conservationist policies by our government, I believe it is equally important that we educate (12) o people to be more caring towards our animals. This is particularly urgent in rural areas, since many farmers view (13) the wildlife as a nuisance that needs to be completely eradicated. While (14) legislation might be useful to show how (15) a tourism can greatly boost (16) the economic prospects of a rural area. Ultimately though, we need to remind people that (17) clock is ticking for (18) the future of these animals, and while their fate might go unnoticed at first, it may in fact be (19) the beginning of (20) the end for the rest of our natural environment too.
There are almost no
animals
left
at all in my country, and species such as tigers, bears and reindeer went extinct several decades ago. While this is
obviously
due to (1) the twin processes of industrialization and urbanization, there is
still
(2) time to preserve what is
left
of our precious wildlife.

Following (3) the horrific civil war during (4) 0 1950s, our natural environment was
further
devastated by (5) an onslaught of (6) rapid industrialization, which is
still
continuing
today
. This, combined with massive construction projects that have covered almost 20% of our total land area, has
left
very
little
room for any wild species to survive.
But
survived they have, although in
increasingly
small
numbers. While there is (7) a
surprisingly
large population of deer in our numerous mountain ranges, otters and other
small
animals
still
live
on (8) banks of our
many
rivers.

(9)The question is, how can we ensure their survival after
so
many
species have already perished? While (10) an obvious answer is (11) o more active conservationist policies by our
government
, I believe it is
equally
important
that we educate (12) o
people
to be more caring towards our
animals
. This is
particularly
urgent in rural areas, since
many
farmers view (13) the wildlife as a nuisance that needs to be completely eradicated.
While
(14) legislation might be useful to
show
how (15) a tourism can
greatly
boost (16) the economic prospects of a rural area.

Ultimately
though, we need to remind
people
that (17) clock is ticking for (18) the future of these
animals
, and while their fate might go unnoticed at
first
, it may in fact be (19) the beginning of (20) the
end
for the rest of our natural environment too.
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IELTS essay In much of the world, there is very little wildlife left. What, if anything, can be done to reverse this trend?

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290 words
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