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some people prefer not to plan for their free time and some people do. what are the benefits of both views

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There are two main ideas about sparing free times. First one is having a prepared schedule for it and second one is not planning for that. furthermore, both views have their own fans and benefits so in following paragraphs I want to discuss both. some people may prefer to pass their free times without planning, which can have some benefits such as relaxing or talking to loved ones. In this way you can keep yourself away from tensions and troubles that you faced in your routine life. Moreover, it may be a proper way to spend some time on your own and concentrate on plans for the future or different types of ideas you've had. In another words, it is one of the best opportunities to improve creativity; main key of success. On the other hand some people would rather to utilise this spare time by doing specific leisure activities as well as holding a proper schedule for it. Definitely, there are many advantages for this one too. For instance, it will helps you to practice some planning skills, specially if your work is related to business and management. Also in this case there are more chances for experiencing new activities such as travelling, which requires planning in advance for where are you visiting, booking for hotel or a place to stay in, reserving some other places for your trip and several other items. In conclusion, it is fun to do both ways of passing free times due to the fact that they have variety of pros and merits.
There are two main
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about sparing free
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one is having a prepared schedule for it and second one is not
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planning
for that.
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furthermore
, both views have their
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fans and benefits
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in following paragraphs I want to discuss both.
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some
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people
may prefer to pass their free
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times
without
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planning
, which can have
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some
benefits such as relaxing or talking to
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loved
ones. In this way you can
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keep
yourself away from tensions and troubles that you faced in your routine life.
Moreover
, it may be a proper way to spend
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some
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time
on your
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own
and concentrate on plans for the future or
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different
types of
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ideas
you've had. In
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, it is one of the best opportunities to
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improve
creativity; main key of success.
On the other hand
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to
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by doing specific leisure activities
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many
advantages for this one too.
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helps
you to practice
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some
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skills
,
specially
if your work
is related
to business and management.
Also
in this case
there are more chances for experiencing new activities such as travelling, which requires
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in advance for where are you visiting, booking for hotel or a place to stay in, reserving
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some
other places for your trip and several other items.
In conclusion
, it is fun to do both ways of passing free
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times
due to the fact that they have variety of pros and merits.
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IELTS essay some people prefer not to plan for their free time and some people do. what are the benefits of both views

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