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In most of the countries the crime rate is more seen in urban areas then rural areas what are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

In most of the countries the crime rate is more seen in urban areas then rural areas what are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem? Wgljk
Undoubtedly, crime is the matter of concern in this era. It is generally seen that in majority of the countries the crime is committed in metropolitan cities at an alarming rate as compared to countryside. There are some plausible reasons behind this as well as some preventions can be taken for this which will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, most of the people live in nuclear families and they all are working. As they have to go outside fir their work and fir other domestic tasks. So, they leave their homes alone. Due to this, the crime is committed by robbers. Furthermore cities are often like crowded, lso it becomes easy for criminals to commit crimes. For example, chain snatching and kidnapping are usually happen in these areas. Moreover, it is seen that due to hectic schedule parents do not monitor their children. They leave them alone at home. In this way children indulge themselves in wrong activities. likely, they start to take drugs fir this purpose they commit crime, which is usually seen in urban areas. To add on, due to unemployment people face poverty because in cities the competition us very high for jobs, which is the most common among youngsters. For this reason people commit crime. However, these problems can be prevented by following some solutions. Firstly, people should make sure about the security of their homes. As well as they should be careful about their belongings, if anything happens around them they should take immediate action. Alomg with this, government should also ensure the safety of people and should implement strict rules. Moreover, they should give jobs to people so that they can get employment and avoid to commit crime. To conclude, all above the reasons are totally responsible for the spiral of crime in most of the cities, while by taking some baby steps from individuals and government this issue can be solved.
Undoubtedly
,
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is the matter of concern in this era. It is
generally
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seen
that in majority of the countries the
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crime
is committed
in metropolitan
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cities
at an alarming rate as compared to countryside. There are
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plausible reasons behind this
as well
as
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preventions can
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in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, most of the
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in nuclear
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families and
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go outside fir their work and fir other domestic tasks.
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, they
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leave
their homes alone. Due to this, the
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crime
is committed
by robbers.
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Furthermore
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cities
are
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often
like crowded,
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lso
it becomes easy for criminals to
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commit
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crimes
.
For example
, chain snatching and kidnapping are
usually
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happen
in these areas.
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that due to hectic schedule parents do not monitor their children. They
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leave
them alone at home. In this way children indulge themselves in
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wrong
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likely
, they
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to take drugs fir this purpose they
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commit
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crime
, which is
usually
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seen
in urban areas. To
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on, due to unemployment
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people
face poverty
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because
in
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cities
the competition us
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high for jobs, which is the most common among youngsters.
For this reason
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people
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commit
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crime
.
However
, these problems can be
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prevented
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some
solutions.
Firstly
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should
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sure about the security of their homes.
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as they should be careful about their belongings, if anything happens around them they should take immediate action.
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Alomg
with this,
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government
should
also
ensure the safety of
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people
and should implement strict
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rules
.
Moreover
, they should give jobs to
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people
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so
that they can
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get
employment and avoid to
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commit
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crime
.
To conclude
, all above the reasons are
totally
responsible for the spiral of
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crime
in most of the
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cities
, while by taking
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some
baby steps from individuals and
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government
this issue can
be solved
.
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IELTS essay In most of the countries the crime rate is more seen in urban areas then rural areas what are the reasons and what can be done to solve this problem?

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