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In most countries of the world the majority of the key leadership positions are held by the elderly members of the society with younger generation being a relegated Ltd to followership position. Some people believe that this is a negative trend and the reverse should be the case. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

In most countries of the world the majority of the key leadership positions are held by the elderly members of the society with younger generation being a relegated Ltd to followership position. Some people believe that this is a negative trend and the reverse should be the case. Discuss both these views and give your opinion Q5BK1
Respect is given to the older people in the form of the leadership post as they have a vast experience of the life and as a followership they train adolescents to become a leader in upcoming days, however, one school of thought consider it a regressive development and reverse is a good thing. This essay will discuss both opposing perceptions before reaching to a logical conclusion. To embark with leadership is essential to run every Nation as well as homes, it need a person with the long life experience as ' Experience is the best teacher', hence, the people who are aged can manage everything remarkably. Additional they completed their responsibility of making career so that they can concentrate on their post as the leader wisely. For example, if we make a leader of age 18 then he cannot focus on study because of the liability is the of the leadership. Consequently, the person is not able to make the bright future in his field. To elaborate further, to become a head one should have a several qualities - a good decision making power, saying the truth always, give justice to right people and punishment to the wrong people - these abilities person couldn't find in a teenagers. Nonetheless, although greyed hair people may proved a better leader, some individuals opine that it is a negative trend as a youngster cannot do whatever they want. they should follow the orders and rules of their leaders, as a result, their life has become dependent and isolated, they cannot be trained for independent life. Weighing both these horizons, it can be concluded that decision of leader affect society as a whole, so that various qualities are required to become a leader and the youngsters are not appropriate for this position.
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in the form of the leadership post as they have a vast experience of the life and as a followership they train adolescents to
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become
a
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leader
in upcoming days,
however
, one school of
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thought
consider it a regressive development and reverse is a
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good
thing. This essay will discuss both opposing perceptions
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before
reaching to a logical conclusion.

To embark with leadership is essential to run every Nation
as well
as homes, it
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need
a person with the long life experience as
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'
Experience is the best teacher',
hence
, the
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people
who
are aged
can manage everything
remarkably
. Additional they completed their responsibility of making career
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so
that they can concentrate on their post as the
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leader
wisely
.
For example
, if we
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make
a
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leader
of age 18 then he cannot focus on study
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because
of the liability is the of the leadership.
Consequently
, the person is not able to
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make
the bright future in his field.

To elaborate
further
, to
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become
a head one should have a several
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qualities
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-
a
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good
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decision making
power, saying the truth always, give justice to right
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people
and punishment to the
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wrong
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people
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these
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person couldn't find in a
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teenagers
.

Nonetheless, although greyed hair
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people
may proved a better
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leader
,
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some
individuals opine that it is a
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negative
trend as a youngster cannot do whatever they want.
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they
should follow the orders and
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rules
of their
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leaders
,
as a result
, their life has
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become
dependent and isolated, they cannot
be trained
for independent life.

Weighing both these horizons, it can
be concluded
that decision of
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leader
affect society as a whole,
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so
that various qualities
are required
to
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become
a
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leader
and the youngsters are not appropriate for this position.
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IELTS essay In most countries of the world the majority of the key leadership positions are held by the elderly members of the society with younger generation being a relegated Ltd to followership position. Some people believe that this is a negative trend and the reverse should be the case. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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