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In many sub-continent countries like India, Pakistan and Sri Lanka, Cricket has become more popular than the national sports of these countries. v.2

In many sub-continent countries like India, Pakistan and Sri Lanka, Cricket has become more popular than the national sports of these countries. v. 2
The game of cricket has undoubtedly bowled over the native sports in the majority of the Asian and neighbouring continents. The popularity of the sport, as many suggests owes to the peculiarity of the game and the flamboyance of the players and team involved. Let us discourse the reasons below. It is quite obvious that native sports in these countries lack the enthusiasm and some unique features which cricket does not. Moreover, national sports are not being played on a global perspective compared to cricket these days. In addition to this, the younger generations are influenced by the game of cricket from their childhood. For example, in India, seldom would you find one describe his childhood devoid of cricket. Hockey being the national sport of India, will find itself miles away on the road to popularity compared to cricket. One other reason for its popularity would be the frequency of international tournaments or series that occur in the circle of cricket, whereas native sport does not acknowledge international viewers on such basis. As a result, cricket and its players splash around the media all the year around, making it closer the mass hearts. For example, the welcome that Australians received after winning the cricket world cup in 1996 acquired  a worldwide attention on television screens. The world witnessed India coming to a stand still on winning world cup following this. History favours the sub-continental countries teams to procure higher rankings in the cricket hierarchy, an illustrated reason for cricket’s popularity in these continents. The fact that majority of the tournaments in world cricket hangs around the Asian subcontinent also adds to the heap of reasons. Asia cup, Sharjah cup etc. exemplifies the same. In conclusion, the native sports are fading importance in the huge waves of roars applauding cricket. This phenomenon is getting more globalised and seems unstoppable. As a sports person myself, I opine that measures should be taken to promote the national sports because no sport is better than other unless played in the right spirit.
The game of
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cricket
has
undoubtedly
bowled over the
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native
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sports
in the majority of the Asian and
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neighbouring
continents. The
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popularity
of the
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sport
, as
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many
suggests owes to the peculiarity of the game and the flamboyance of the players and team involved.
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Let
us discourse the
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reasons
below.

It is quite obvious that
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native
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sports
in these countries lack the enthusiasm and
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some
unique features which
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cricket
does not.
Moreover
, national
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sports
are not
being played
on a global perspective compared to
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cricket
these days.
In addition
to this, the younger generations
are influenced
by the game of
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cricket
from their childhood.
For example
, in India, seldom would you find one
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describe
his childhood devoid of
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cricket
. Hockey being the national
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sport
of India, will find itself miles away on the road to
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popularity
compared to cricket.

One other
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reason
for its
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popularity
would be the frequency of international tournaments or series that occur in the circle of
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cricket
, whereas
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native
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sport
does not acknowledge international viewers on such basis.
As a result
,
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cricket
and its players splash around the media all the year around, making it closer the mass hearts.
For example
, the welcome that Australians received after winning the
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cricket
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world
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cup
in 1996 acquired
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a worldwide attention on television screens. The
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world
witnessed India coming to a stand
still
on winning
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world
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cup
following this.

History
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favours
the sub-continental countries teams to procure higher rankings in the
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cricket
hierarchy, an illustrated
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reason
for
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cricket’s
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popularity
in these continents. The fact that majority of the tournaments in
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world
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cricket
hangs around the Asian subcontinent
also
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adds
to the heap of
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reasons
. Asia
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cup
,
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Sharjah
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cup
etc. exemplifies the same.

In conclusion
, the
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native
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sports
are fading importance in the huge waves of roars applauding
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cricket
. This phenomenon is getting more
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globalised
and seems unstoppable. As a
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sports
person myself, I opine that measures should
be taken
to promote the national
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sports
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because
no
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sport
is better than other unless played in the right spirit.
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IELTS essay In many sub-continent countries like India, Pakistan and Sri Lanka, Cricket has become more popular than the national sports of these countries. v. 2

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