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In many situations people who break the law must be warned instead of punish

In many situations people who break the law must be warned instead of punish VEqkm
It is generally suggested that the warning rather than penalty must be given to the individuals who disobey the rules, however I disagree with the given notion since crime rate is increasing day by day and punishment must be their to maintain discipline in the society. The prime catalyst behind my disagreement is, alarming crime rate, owing if lawbreaker get warnings then they either reattempt the offence or lose the fear of being sentenced. Proving ahead, when these people attempt the felon crimes such as murder; this thing not only, restricts the freedom of masses but also, upsurge the fear of death in the people. A good example of this is the Indian people neither follow the rules and regulation nor they get punished. The legal body of India had not taken the strict action against these criminals. Now, if the strict policies should be adopted by the authorities then offence rate might be dropped in India. Hence, punishment must be mandatory due to the inclining crime rate. Further reinforcing my idea discipline in society, for the reason if government leave a criminal on warning then, it makes a negative impact on other people; this foster another individuals to do the similar offence. Also, when felon is put in a prison, he gets the strict punishment from the police that teach him to learn a good lesson. For instance, in America the felon rate is often low because either people are restricted to pay the penalty of their mistake or they put into the prison in the crime is big. This way American citizens lead a fearless and comfortable life. Thereby, rules and regulations are significant to maintain peace in the society. To conclude, I believe above mentioned reasons are evident to state that humans must be sentenced either they do the petty crimes or attempt murder. To maintain good discipline in the society the strict policies should be adopted by governm
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notion since
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rate
is increasing day by day and punishment
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must
be their to maintain discipline in the society.

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crime
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rate
, owing if lawbreaker
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get
warnings then they either reattempt the
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offence
or lose the fear of
being sentenced
. Proving ahead, when these
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people
attempt the felon
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crimes
such as murder; this thing not
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, restricts the freedom of masses
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. A
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example of this is the Indian
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people
neither follow the
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rules
and
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regulation nor
they
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get
punished. The legal body of India had not taken the
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strict
action against these criminals.
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, if the
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strict
policies should
be adopted
by the authorities then
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offence
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rate
might
be dropped
in India.
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, punishment
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must
be mandatory due to the inclining
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crime
rate.

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reinforcing my
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idea
discipline in society, for the reason if
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government
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leave
a criminal on warning then, it
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a
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negative
impact on other
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people
; this foster another individuals to do the similar
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offence
.
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, when felon
is put
in a prison, he
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the
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punishment from the police that teach him to learn a
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lesson.
For instance
, in America the felon
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rate
is
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often
low
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because
either
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people
are restricted
to pay the penalty of their
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mistake or
they put into the prison in the
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crime
is
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big
. This way American citizens lead a fearless and comfortable life. Thereby,
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rules
and regulations are significant to maintain peace in the society.

To conclude
, I believe above mentioned reasons are evident to state that humans
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must
be sentenced
either they do the petty
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crimes
or attempt murder. To maintain
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good
discipline in the society the
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strict
policies should
be adopted
by
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governm
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IELTS essay In many situations people who break the law must be warned instead of punish

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
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