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In many places, prisons are overcrowded and expensive for governments to maintain. Yet, when offenders are released, they end up back in prison a short while later. Do prisons work? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

In many places, prisons are overcrowded and expensive for governments to maintain. Yet, when offenders are released, they end up back in prison a short while later. Do prisons work? PVrJX
Most of the prison population is fuelled by a high level of recidivism. prisons are overpopulated because day by day convicts are increasing and it becomes a burden to the government for maintaining and it also cost-effective, while the prisoners are overcrowded there is a need for more security and staff. firstly, being in the prison does not work, many offenders enjoy life in prison by having luxuries like watching television, using mobile devices. It is a place where lawbreakers are punished instead of this they were leading a better life than society. Even offenders are released within a short time they intend to commit another crime and they finally end up back in prison.
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prison
by having luxuries like watching television, using mobile devices. It is a place where lawbreakers
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of this they were leading a better life than society. Even offenders
are released
within a short time they intend to commit another
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IELTS essay In many places, prisons are overcrowded and expensive for governments to maintain. Yet, when offenders are released, they end up back in prison a short while later. Do prisons work?

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